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A melting pot of personalities; Stanford Letter to Roommate Supplement


EmiEvi 2 / 10 2  
Dec 29, 2012   #1
Prompt: Write a note to your future roommate that reveals something about you that will help us get to know you better.

Hi future roommate!

My name is Evelyn, otherwise known as Evy, but sometimes spelled as Evi or Eve. The Evelyn that you'll meet is a melting pot of personalities: a little bit of weirdness mixed with a touch of optimism, a dash of humor, and a whole lot of inquisitiveness. My interests are many; they result from my constant urge to explore surrounding ideas. I absolutely adore learning about obscure topics and sharing my discoveries with people, so if I end up starting a conversation with "Guess what I just found out!" you'll know where I'm getting at. One of the topics that I've recently been excited about is futurology and technological advancements, which is probably a result of all the sci-fi/dystopian novels I enjoy reading from time to time.

Another thing you should know - I'm a long distance runner. Running is one of my passions, a passion that started after a little coercion from some of my friends in middle school. If you're a runner too, I think it'd be great if we could run together, which I find to be one of the best ways to truly get to know people - that is, if we aren't gasping for air after a long sprint. If running isn't your idea of a good time, I also think a cup of coffee would suffice in getting to know you better too. Besides running, I also love to draw, a hobby that developed out of an intense love of anime and manga. In fact, anime and manga is what initially got me interested in exploring other cultures, which is why I'm planning on studying International Relations here at Stanford and also why I'm learning Japanese and Korean through self-study. To travel around the world is one of my dreams so that the explorer in me can satisfy those pesky urges to discover something new.

The one thing you should definitely know about me is that I'm easy to get along with - I won't mind any of your unique quirks. I'm open to anything, and I'm excited to learn more about you as well. I hope our time together will help us both open our eyes to new experiences and even blossom a great friendship. See you in the fall!

This is first rough draft and probably riddled with grammatical errors, so I would appreciate any feedback or suggestions!
Also, I'm about 63 characters over the limit; is there anything too wordy or somewhat unimportant that I can cut out?
EFalade06 1 / 5  
Dec 29, 2012   #2
I like how you've expressed that you like running, i like running too! I'm running a marathon for charity pretty soon!
OP EmiEvi 2 / 10 2  
Dec 29, 2012   #3
Thanks! I don't know if I should focus on one or two aspects of my interests or just keep all the ones I already have... Do you have any suggestions for revision?
EFalade06 1 / 5  
Dec 29, 2012   #4
I think you should focus on running and how it's maybe changed you or helped you grow as an individual, e.g how it gives you new challenges?
hellogoodbye 2 / 20  
Dec 29, 2012   #5
THIS IS AWESOME.

This essay is genuinely one that I thoroughly enjoyed reading.

You conveyed your quirky yet really likable personality as well as your interests.

Definitely showed your open mindedness.

Great job!

(Help me with mine? : D)
OP EmiEvi 2 / 10 2  
Dec 29, 2012   #6
Thanks! Do you have any suggestions for anything I can shorten or maybe elaborate on to make it better?
snibberbit 4 / 11 2  
Dec 29, 2012   #7
I LOVED this essay! It is relaxed and I really got a sense of who you were - it makes me want to get to know you better! And that is what Stanford is looking for in their essays. Great job and good luck!

Could you please check out mine?
alexhoffy - / 5 1  
Dec 29, 2012   #8
If you're looking to cut it down, I would get rid of ", but sometimes spelled as Evi or Eve." There will be a lot of people with this same type of comment.


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