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May is the fifth month of the year; Why number five is important?


fsolano94 16 / 30  
May 19, 2013   #1
Essay Prompt: May is the fifth month of the year. Write a letter to the number five explaining why five is important. Be serious or be funny. Either way, here's a high five to you for being original. (Maximum of 250 words allowed)

Five you are so important because you represent the five senses which include, sight, hearing, smell, taste, and touch. Without you the World would be blind, tasteless, and defunct. The old saying two is better than one can be applied here in this context. The only difference is five is better than four, three, two, and one. Five is better than its four preceding numbers because; without sight we could not see the world around us, without hearing we could not listen to our leaders, without smell we could not detect a fire in our home, without taste we could not enjoy nutrition, and without touch we would not have the ability to comfort our loved ones with a hug or a kiss. You are a whole lot more than you think five. Not only do you represent the five senses, but you also represent the most famous figure in geometry as well as one of the most important administrative buildings in the United States. You represent a pentagon, the department of Defense administrative building in America and the five sided figure in geometry. No wonder why you are such an easy number to remember. Perhaps that's why some businesses will sell their products for $5 dollars instead of $4.99; it helps customers remember the cost of the company's product. You truly are a star to all of us beings on the planet; you even represent the five endpoints on a star.
Didgeridoo - / 306 191  
May 19, 2013   #2
It's a good response, but I think you can get a little more creative than listing a bunch of things that come in fives or have five sides... Or at least name more than just the five senses, the pentagon and star, and $5.
junisha rai 3 / 5 1  
May 20, 2013   #3
You truly are a star to all of us beings on the planet; you even represent the five endpoints on a star.

. you have squeezed in this extra information (eg) in the end which does not have a significant impact on the readers mind. you could have elaborated on this point a little more.

overall u have an amazing style of writing. you have the ability to be creative in a topic which would have been ignored by a mediocre writer.

thanks
sapphire9xvn - / 1  
May 20, 2013   #4
I agree with Junisha rai that it would be better if you give more supporting sentences for the last thesis. ( Five represents the five endpoints on a star )

Overall, the essay is well-written with interesting ideas . You came up with 5 senses first which quite impressed me.
However, I feel that it is fairly disproportionate. Through the essay, the first thesis seems to dominate while other three ones are hastily written.

I suggest some more examples for things connected with 5 such as a hand with 5 fingers, 5 classical elements of the universe ( according to ancient Greek philosophers ) , 5 basic tastes and for superstition , Easter people consider 5 to be a lucky number.

Please give me you comment to my review! ;)
Thank you!
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
May 20, 2013   #5
Five you are so important because you represent the five senses which include, sight, hearing, smell, taste, and touch!

.... Added some punctuation.
As I saw the word "five", what it struck me was the five fingers. You haven't had any reference to that :)
It's a very impressive response.... You can write well and I enjoyed reading it.
Good luck with your application!
lespeed 2 / 3 1  
Jun 3, 2013   #6
I like sapphire9xvn's suggestions. In the east, the five classical elements which include metal, wood, water, fire, earth are very important to the spiritual life. Furthermore, Five represents five blessings and five virtues.


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