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Issue of importance essay: Dishonesty in Sports!


afflictedfury 1 / 1  
Feb 27, 2013   #1

Dishonesty in Sport



After the eighty-nine minutes of exhausting running the score was still zero-zero. As the clock stuck ninety I was dribbling the ball, and slithering my way down the green pitch. The defenders were hot on my tail and the clock was winding down. I went past two defenders but the third one stole the ball within moments. My pride was hurt but I was not going to let them get away with it. I gave chase and finally in our penalty box I had my man cornered. I moved as fast as I could like a snake pouncing on its prey I had slid under the offensive player and stole the ball. No contact with his legs at all yet the whistle was blown as he, seemingly untouched, fell on the ground. That penalty kick cost us the game to qualify for the playoffs. We had lost because of a diver, and a cheat.

I love the sport of soccer, and any other sport that can be played competitively. However, the level of foul play in these sports is an issue that is dear to my heart. I have always been told that honesty is the best policy, and as child that was what I lived by. However, the older I got the more I realized that many people believe that the best policy is the one where you are the winner. It does not matter whether the sport is a national level soccer game or a pick-up basketball at the local gym.

A Sport can be one of the most important aspects in a person's life. It keeps a person fit and healthy, it gives a feeling of unity and belonging, and most importantly it can fuel goals and dreams. In many countries sports teams have an almost religious following. The players themselves are celebrities and hold a startling amount of influence. They let their passion and love for the game get out of hand and become and obsession to win. Their sins on the field are ruining the sport that people around the world value so much.
temptprovidence 8 / 163 35  
Feb 28, 2013   #2
that was a good one with a lovely boost of idioms and proverbs:)... but there is no constancy of topic... every paragraph discusses a new... such as in second and third... its honesty and then sports respectively...

otherwise you have got a good expression... and one more thing... your only mistake besides innovation is the lack of commas:) othewise innovation is your just right...:)

well, what was the purpose of writing it anyway????? because if the this sudden change in the direction of topic is allowed or not:)??
OP afflictedfury 1 / 1  
Feb 28, 2013   #3
thank you so much im going to change it up a bit to have it make more sense. I tried to start the essay of with something a bit personal, and then get broader. I wrote it for the UT: Austin acceptance essay 2: The Issue of importance essay.

EDIT: Quick question should I list specific instances about foul play in sports like the infamous hand of god play in the world cup?
temptprovidence 8 / 163 35  
Feb 28, 2013   #4
can be but it must be just a comprehensive intro about that..
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Mar 7, 2013   #5
My pride was hurt but I was not going to let them get away with it.

My pride was shattered, but I was certainly not letting them get away with it.

I gave a chase and finally in our penalty box I had my man cornered.

However, the level of foul play in these sports is an issue that isdear to my heart.

.... well... when you say "dear to my heart", you generally mean something that you hold on to very profoundly. But in this case it is something that hurts your feelings. So this is my suggestion;

However, the level of foul play in these sports is an issue that keeps worrying my heart.

and as a child that was what I lived by.

and I lived by this policy.


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