Why is Lehigh a good match for you? What contributions will you make to the academic experience and to campus life? (As a guideline, your response should be between 150-250 words.)
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Coming from a large, competitive public high school, I know what it's like to be challenged. Lehigh is a perfect match for me because it combines quality academics and the flexibility of a small, private university. Despite this information, it was not until I toured Lehigh's campus during the spring of my junior year that I figured out it is where I want to be for the next four years. At a recent Senior Open House, Dean of Admissions J. Leon Washington spoke passionately about Lehigh and its early decision plan-a plan suitable for those who find their "wow" at a school. At Lehigh, I found my "wow."
The invaluable work ethic I've gained from being surrounded by competitive high school students will carry over into the classroom at Lehigh. I come from a school that is ethnically diverse and I've experienced being the minority. Being in this environment has taught me to embrace and appreciate the ethnic differences in my school, and in turn become more cultured and open-minded. I think my high school serves as a microcosm of the real world, in that cultural differences are omnipresent and should be recognized and respected. The diversity I'm surrounded by has given me a unique perspective, one I'd like to share at Lehigh.
usually when you write about why a university is a good place for you, you include academics, extra curricular activities, and community service that you hope to take advantage of at the campus. I would recommend being more specific. Talk about what you hope to learn and how lehigh will help you or a activity that you're passionate about that connects with what lehigh offers.
true. i edited a lot since this version, and i'll continue to do so with your advice.thanks !
i agree with tennislover, and also think that some parts of the essay should be more specific. in the first sentence especially--the part that says "i know what it's like to be challenged" almost had me thinking challenged as in...having a learning disability. which is certainly not what you want to say! haha maybe its just me, but you might want to clarify that part. with the last sentence, try to elaborate more on what your "unique perspective" is. no two people share the same perspective on life--everyone has a unique perspective. what makes YOUR unique perspective "unique-er" than the rest?
best of luck! :)
Great 'wow' theme... great concepts about work ethic from high competition... when you write ethnic, a better word might be "culturally." Also, when you discuss diversity, you also might want to mention achievements of people from either gender, various ability levels, students with disabilities, etc.
It would also be great to give an example of what happened when you were int he minority.
:-) great job, though!!
