I did some revisions, and came up with two different options: one a lot like the first, and one that's more anecdotal. If you could give me feedback on either, and tell me which you like better, that would be lovely. =) Thanks!
Here's the prompt again:
Virtually all of Stanford's undergraduates live on campus. What would you want your future roommate to know about you? Tell us something about you that will help your future roommate -- and us -- know you better.
OPTION ONE: SMALL REVISIONS
Dear Future Roommate,
It's common knowledge that every dorm room contains a normal roommate and a weird roommate; if your roommate isn't weird, then you are. However, you'll have nothing to worry about, Future Roommate, because I will probably be the weird roommate.
I'll seem perfectly normal at first; I'll be introverted, yet pleasant, and I'll smile a lot. Don't worry; the shyness will disappear shortly after we meet. When this happens, I'll still smile a lot, but please don't be alarmed when I pull out a ukulele and start to sing, "All the world seems in tune on a spring afternoon as we're poisoning pigeons in the park." Murdering innocent pigeons isn't really my cup of tea, and I do sing normal songs, too (as opposed to Tom Lehrer's "Pigeons In The Park"). And please try not to stare when I start to come up with terrible puns about 185 random objects walking into bars. Some of my wordplay might elicit smiles, and thinking of jokes is actually quite stimulating; you should join me sometime. You'll also notice that my closet is in rainbow order, I like to point out Mini Coopers when I see them, and I love to crunch numbers in a world where math is the ostracized runt of the academic litter.
I like to think I'm normal in some ways, though. While my ukulele, jokes, and academics are important, my family and friends transcend everything else in my life. I thoroughly enjoy art and music, as well as the occasional rock concert (jumping frequently enough for my 5'2" self to see the band). When I can, I like to snowboard and play soccer. I hope that's enough for us to become good friends, Future Roommate.
Best wishes,
Rachel
OPTION TWO: THE OVERHAUL
Dear Future Roommate,
It's common knowledge that every dorm room contains a normal roommate and a weird roommate; if your roommate isn't weird, then you are. However, you'll have nothing to worry about, Future Roommate, because I will probably be the weird roommate.
If you don't believe me, take a gander into one of my childhood beach days. Everyone knows Lake Washington isn't the most pristine body of water there is. I discovered this at the tender age of six when I found a small, dead fish lying on the sand. Any normal six-year-old would scrunch their nose, utter a long, nasally "ew," and play on the other side of the beach. Being the odd little girl that I was, I retrieved a bucket, filled it with sand and water, and put the corpse in the bucket. I named it Fish, and it was my pet fish for the day. Peculiar, I know, but no one could say that I hated animals at that age. When my mom didn't permit me to bring Fish home, though, I wasn't particularly heartbroken. I suppose no one could say that I wasn't hygienic at that age, either.
I realize that I was truly bizarre as a child. However, I did grow up. Today, I'm still bizarre, but I have normal qualities, too. I sing about poisoning pigeons in the park on the ukulele, but I also enjoy most anything I hear on the alternative rock station. I spend my time thinking up terrible puns, but I'll see a movie any day of the week when I'm not busy with homework, rehearsal, or soccer. I love math, fake mustaches, and the rain, but my family and friends transcend every part of my life. I hope that's enough normalcy for us to become good friends, Future Roommate.
Best wishes,
Rachel
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