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here is a revised edition. i re-worded some things, but am willing to make major changes if need be
My blood-drenched body shivered in the cool room of the South Indian government hospital, wails of pain reverberating through the walls. I was born; but I was not alone. On either side, lay my identical brothers. I have lived nearly every moment of life with them and for that, I am blessed.
The best –and worst—thing about being a triplet is that someone is always there. If I needed a friend, a workout partner, a critic, a tutor, a shoulder to lean on, I've been blessed with two of each. In 7th grade, I had a tough time with pre-algebra. I asked Sibi, my five-minute older brother, for help, and he taught me for a good hour. At the end, I finally understood it. My sophomore year, we had to write a paper about Shakespeare. While I was writing it, Rishi, my five-minute younger brother, caught a glimpse and nit-picked nearly the entire essay. He did give me few pointers and it turned out to be quite constructive. I honestly cannot remember a time in my life when I've been lonely, bored, clueless, or helpless. Each moment is something new and that I cherish deeply.
One thing I've learned about my brothers is that I had the wrong impression of them. Very early in my childhood, I thought they hated me. For example, Sibi was always funny. Needless to say, I wasn't. Everytime I made a joke, he would tell me it was awful. Rishi, was also unkind, but in a different way. While Sibi was direct about how he felt, Rishi was far more reclusive and would rarely contribute to conversations. During 2nd grade, we were in the same art class. I had drawn an elephant, and had made the mistake of asking Rishi if it was good or bad. He looked at the picture, looked at me, looked at the picture, and just walked away, his face in disgust. I assumed that this is how all of the families treated each other. In stark contrast, everything they did actually helped me. They have made me a stronger student, by giving me tips and hints; they have made me a more-physically fit individual, by pushing me beyond my limits; but mostly, they have made me a better brother and person, by teaching me to accept criticism, and to love our family.
Now, we have reached our biggest challenge: college. While I will be sad when we part ways, there is an eager and excited energy within me. Knowledge and freedom are only a year away. I am confident about my future, thanks to Sibi and Rishi.
I am completely used to getting stares everywhere I go. Not because I look different, but because I look similar. It gives me a sense of pride to be brothers. They are hard-working, driven, talented individuals and I am honored to be part of the family. Without my two brothers, I would not be a triplet; I would not be me.
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