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'high-energy, loud, and crazy / ambicious person' - NCSSM Application


Yeereina 4 / 4  
Jan 1, 2008   #1
Personality, what makes you unique:

I am very versatile and can be very adaptable to different situations, especially schools. I have been to three different elementary schools and three different middle schools. So I am very aware of the different ways schools operate like bell schedules or grading scales. I have become very aware of the different styles of teaching that teachers use like straightforward or constant thinking throughout class. I have also adjusted to different expectations of teachers in each school. Some you can get away with a lot, while others are extremely strict. Because of so many transfers, I have learned to become very friendly and acceptant of different people and their personalities. I have started three grades halfway into the school year at a new school. I have to be very sociable in order to be able to talk and communicate with people at a new school. When I first walk into a new classroom, everyone stares at me like they have never seen a human before; no one wants to talk to you either. It is hard at first, not knowing anyone, nobody wanting to be the first to break this barrier of foreignness, and then realizing that you will have to be the first to talk, and finally choosing who would be a good person to talk to without giving you a strange look and ignoring you. At first, I hated being introduced into a new environment, but now, after four different times, I believe that I have become quite immune to the awkward and uncomfortable silence, and am able to get into the follow of things quite easily. For example, I lived in Washington DC for only half a year, but when I left, I had actually grown quite attached to a few of them. I cried, and hugged all of my close friends, and promised then all that I would keep in touch with them. If I am placed in a new situation, I will grow very comfortable and use to it quickly.

I do believe that in general, I am a very generous person. If someone is in need or needs help, I will always be happy to help if it doesn't interfere with what I am doing. For example, I was at the Marbles Children's Museum's grand opening in downtown Raleigh. As a volunteer, I was assigned to watch a display; however, another person was there on my shift so I decided to find another job to do. I found a face painting station, and decided that it was new, and I had never done it before. I was provided with very small paintbrushes and small containers of paint. With no chairs, I was forced to kneel to stand on my knees, which after five hours of face painting, is quite painful. However, it was all worth it, as soon as I finished painting a child's face, they would look in the mirror, and their face would light up, before running to their parents and explain what I had painted on their faces. The face painting area was supposed to be a quick stop on touring the museum, no line was supposed to be created. So at first, I painted small things like flowers, ladybugs, and cars, but one boy asked me if I could paint his whole face, I was not sure if I was allowed to, but the boy looked so cute, and I just couldn't resist, so I ended up painting a Spiderman mask on the boy's face. The next four or five boys that were next all wanted me to do the same thing, and I could not say no, since that would be unfair. After that, every boy wanted me to paint their whole face. At first, there were only a few people in line, and I had to wait for people to come to out to my little table. However, painting a whole face with a small paintbrush is very time consuming, especially Spiderman masks. After an hour of painting just those, I look up and there are nearly sixty children all sitting down watching me with eager eyes, waiting for to be the next person in line. I wasn't even supposed to be at that station, and I just wanted to do some for fun, so I picked up a brush and did a few faces, but when so many people were lined up, I just couldn't walk away, and let the children leave disappointed. I was very surprised at how well my face painting "business" was running; it overwhelmed me how crucial I was to the happiness of each child that day. After I returned home, my arm was so sore from having to hold it up all day from the painting, my knees hurt from the kneeling, and my hands were covered with paint. I was exhausted, but I couldn't help but smile, it felt so good, just giving up something just as simple as time, but in return gaining so much more- happy smiles and laughter. I also swore that I could memorize Spiderman's face in my dreams.

At first, when I meet someone, I am very shy, and keep to myself. I will rarely communicate; sometimes even go as far as making no eye contact, although I know it is very rude. My emotions will be kept inside, and I will just be silent. It takes me time before I get comfortable with people, however. But as soon as I am, I let go of all my restraints. I become the happy exuberant person that I know myself to be. The more I familiar I am with a person, the more open I am. But when I am with my close friends, I am my pure self, high-energy, loud, and crazy. I do however, know how to restrain myself. I seem to have quite a number of personalities. With adults, I am very proper, and I will talk about education and serious topics, without thinking how boring it is. With some other friends, I am laid back and care free; with others I am studious and detailed. As I said before, I am very versatile, and will do everything to make sure the people I am with are comfortable around me.

What words best describe your character? Give specific examples of why each word is applicable to you:

Ambitious:
I am confident in myself and my skills, if not too much. I always think I will win, so I try my hardest in competitions and contests, although deep inside, I know there is a small chance that I will win any of them. I have entered so many contests and competitions; I can't even keep track of them. I have entered writing, art, piano, violin, swimming, track, science, and history competitions. I have also applied to many different clubs from Science Olympiad to National Honor Society. I can probably count the ones I have only won on one hand. However, when I do not win, I am not very upset; I understand that there are so many people better than me in anything that I enter. Although I am confident in my abilities, I accept it when I do not win. Actually, on the contrary, I am quite stunned when I win or am accepted into something, because of how much I am used to rejection. For example, I know that I am not a very strong writer, but I still entered to Kenyon Review writing contest and wrote a poem about life. Also, I have entered the PTSA Reflections art competition ever since elementary school. Although I have never won outside of my school, I enjoy painting and drawing immensely, and that's what brings me back to it every year. I always end up staying until two or three in the morning it is due to complete it. I always get too absorbed in the little details when I start working on it a long before it's due. Then when it is a few days before submission, it hits me and I realize that I have to speed up my pace. But I cannot speed up without ruining my quality, so I remain at my slow steady pace, which means I have to end up finishing it in the early morning, every year. If I see a contest that I am interested in, mostly art related, I will not hesitate to enter it, like design a cover for the school directory, for instance. I dream big and believe that anything is possible if you put your mind to it. In the future, I would like to attend Duke University and major in art, although it is not Duke's forte. Then I would like to attend Parsons School for Design in New York City for graduate school. After that, I would like to own a small boutique that sells my own clothing designs. If it runs well, I would like to open another store on the eastern border, and slowly spread stores from the east coast to the west coast. I would like my clothing line to become a classic, one that everyone knows, like Chanel or Ralph Lauren. When I reach the west, I plan to start a movie career. Hopefully, I will earn roles and if I am successful enough, I will become famous be recognized world-wide. Some time during my movie career, I would like to earn a star on the Hollywood Walk of Fame. The chances of this becoming a reality are slim, but I will do everything in my power to make it possible. I believe that once you put your mind into something, that anything can be accomplished, so that is why I enter so many contests. I believe if I try hard enough, I will eventually win.

Dedicated:
Ever since I was little, I have always been aware of my surrounding peers' situations. If my friend carelessly mentions she will go to a competition over the weekend, I will naturally ask her on Monday how she fared. For example my friend and I were working on a brochure for a project for three days. We collaborated over the internet and decided that she would write half of the paragraphs and I would complete the other half. Once I was finished, I would email her my paragraphs and she would compile them into a brochure. We stayed up until twelve the first night and one the second night, to try to finish it ask quickly as possible. On the third day, at around twelve at night, I finally emailed her my completed paragraphs and messaged her about my completion. I waited for her to message me back about her completion of the brochure. At one, I called and asked her how it was going since she hadn't replied in over an hour. She answered that there were issues with the printer, and that she would have to re-format the brochure. She told me that I could go sleep if I wanted to, since I was no longer needed for that portion of the project. But I remained at the computer and waited for her call about finishing the brochure. At two, I called her again, and she told me that the printer could not print on the edges and that she would have to cut off some off the paper she was printing on. She urged me to go sleep-she could tell I needed it from my sleepy voice. I ignored her however, and remained at the computer, waiting for her notification. At three, she messaged me and told her she was almost finished with the brochure. Finally, at fifteen minutes until four she called me and shouted that the brochure was at last a success, the printer finally printed. I finally retired to my bed, satisfied that our project was complete.

Independent:
In the Spring Break of seventh grade, I traveled with my fellow seventh graders to Rome, Athens, Pompeii, and Vatican City as a class field trip. My social studies teacher and my science teacher along with a few parental chaperones were the only ones there; my parents were not accompanying me. They kept track of about fifty of us. In Rome, I visited the Colosseum, the Pantheon, the Roman Forum, Trevi Fountain, and the Spanish steps. In Athens, we were awed by the magnificence of the Parthenon and the original Olympic grounds at Olympia. At Pompeii, we walked through the remains of the village destroyed by Mt. Vesuvius. In Vatican City, we were given a tour of St. Peter's Basilica. Without my parents present, I learned to not rely on them. For example, we visited Pompeii, but my batteries in my camera ran out, so could not take pictures of the spectacular ruins, which I regretted immensely. Since that time, everywhere I went on the trip, I remembered to pack an extra set of batteries, since I did not want to miss anything. Other than responsibility, I also learned self-control. No one was there to encourage or discourage me to spend my money. It was all based on my decisions. My parents were not there to limit what I could purchase; they gave me a fixed amount of money and trusted that I would handle it maturely. Even if wanted to purchase something I really wanted, but I knew was a bad deal, I trained myself so stay away from it. For example, in a gift shop in Vatican City, I saw an exquisite bracelet, I immediately fell in love with it, and I purchased it for twelve euros. As we exited Vatican City and entered Rome, I saw the same bracelet in a store window for only three euros. I was immediately taken back at how rash I had been in purchasing it. Ever since, I learned to not buy everything I like, but to consider its price, and decide if it is really worth it. To try to cope with overspending, I placed a certain amount of money in my wallet each day. Another part of self-control I learned was to be able to go to bed at a certain time. I was rooming with two other girls, and once we started watching television, there was no stop to us. I had to learn how to force myself to stop and preparing myself for bed. I also had set my own alarm clock, and actually get up when the alarm went off. No one was going to come wake me up if I overslept. Organization was something else I learned. No one cared about how your suitcase or room looked. So I had to tidy up a little bit everyday to ensure that once it is time to leave the hotel, it doesn't take my roommates and me an extra hour to clean up, something I learned the hard way. Responsibility was the most important lesson I learned on this trip. I had to learn to be able to keep track of my tickets, boarding passes, keys, cards, money, luggage and passports. If I had lost any of it, I would have been in big trouble. I learned how to keep things secure, since there were many pickpockets where we toured. Before I left the hotel each day, I created a mental checklist and checked to make sure I had everything. My parents and teachers had put a lot of trust in me and my fellow peers, and I wasn't going to let them down buy losing something. Although the trip overall was quite expensive, the lessons I learned made it all worth it.

What else do you want to make sure the NCSSM selection committee knows about you? Be specific:

My parents have owned a restaurant ever since I was born, so I grew up around its conditions. As I grew older, I gradually took on jobs at the restaurant. In 8th grade, they allowed me to answer some phones and take orders in our restaurant. As I progressed through high school, I took on more jobs, like cooking, assuming the job of a fry cook, waitress, and cashier, and sometimes directing the restaurant on my own. I have learned to be patient, precise, efficient, and a leader.

Out of many invaluable lessons, I have learned patience. Many times, when I am taking an order, the customer will be undecided on what they want. In the background, I can hear phones ringing and the kitchen in complete chaos, but I put on a smile and continue to wait for the customer. Sometimes, a customer comes back to argue about the quality of their food. Most of the time, there is a reasonable explanation why the dish tastes unusual that time. However, as I worker in the restaurant, the customer is always right. You must replace their order or refund them if they are not satisfied at all. For example, one lady ordered a dish consisting of chicken, vegetables, and tofu. After preparing it, I served her the food and promptly returned to the kitchen. Not five minutes into her meal, she brought the food up to our counter and told me that the chicken was raw. I was very surprised at the comment, and requested her to elaborate on her assertion. She poked the tofu with her fork and exclaimed that the chicken was not cooked. I explained to her that the raw chicken was actually tofu, and that that was the way tofu was supposed to be. She seemed unconvinced and stood firmly with her complaint. I asked her if there was anything else I could do for her, and she replied that she wanted another dish, one without tofu. I calmly agreed and with a fake smile, I took her plate and returned to the kitchen. As soon as I entered through its doors, my face fell, and inside, I was filled with rage. I couldn't understand why she didn't believe what I was saying. I told my parents and they took it in without any comment, used to it from years of experience. Once the new dish was prepared, I served it with a big smile, offered my deepest apologies, and told her to enjoy her food. I learned that patience with a customer resulted in the happiness. No matter how angry they make you, you must remain calm and steady.

I also learned to be accurate and precise when taking and packing orders. When the restaurant is very busy, boxes look all the same when it is busying and I am panicking. I still need to package all the orders correctly, because I, just like my parents, hate a customer calling us to complain about how they are missing something, so something is incorrect. When this happens, and my parents are forced to remake the order, I feel very embarrassed that I let my parents down. So in order to avoid that, I strive to be precise.

Efficiency is a very important part of the restaurant. If there is something you can do fast, you have to try to make it even faster. If I am not efficient, the restaurant will be out of sync and things will start slowing down. In order to keep the customers happy, every worker needs to work efficiently, so all the things are prepared and on time. There is a lot of teamwork involved too. If one person forgets to do their part, he slows down the whole chain. Along with efficiency, came prioritization. If one food cooks faster than the other, I will have to make sure that the slower food starts cooking first before I cook the other one, so both foods will be done at the same time. Without efficiency, the workers will be unhappy since they have to wait, the customers will be unhappy, and most of all you feel embarrassed that everyone is waiting on you, since you were not paying attention to the orders.

This has also taught me leadership. Sometimes when both my parents are delivering orders, I will be the only one at the restaurant, other than the two chefs. I need to call out the correct order for each chef, and to each in a different language, one in Mandarin and one in Spanish. This makes it crucial that each chef gets the correct order. Sometimes, I will have to tell them in what order to cook things. It is actually very intimidating, ordering them around. I am telling people twice my age what to do. When they actually do it, I feel so proud of myself. I also feel very accomplished when I complete the order from taking it, announcing it, packaging it, and delivering it to the customer.

Without working in the restaurant, I would not have been able to learn these lessons. These lessons are something that parents would not have been able to teach me. Although I don't get paid, these skills I have acquired are worth more than any amount of money.
EF_Team2 1 / 1,708  
Jan 2, 2008   #2
I have learned to become very friendly and acceptant of different people

When I first walk into a new classroom, everyone stares at me like they have never seen a human before; no one wants to talk to you either. It is hard at first, not knowing anyone, nobody wanting to be the first to break this barrier of foreignness, and then realizing that you will have to be the first to talk, and finally choosing who would be a good person to talk to without giving you a strange look and ignoring you.

am able to get into the follow of things quite easily.

I had actually grown quite attached to a few of them.

I cried, and hugged all of my close friends, and promised then all that I would keep in touch with them. If I am placed in a new situation, I will grow very comfortable and use to it quickly.

With no chairs, I was forced to kneel to stand on my knees,
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I can probably count the ones I have only won on one hand.

I always end up staying until two or three in the morning it is due to complete it.

Greetings!

Your essays are very well-written! Here are a few editing suggestions for you:

although it is not Duke's forte. - You might want to explain this a little more; why, then, do you want to go there?

my parents were not accompanying me. They kept track of about fifty of us - This makes it sounds as if your parents were keeping track of you.

I had to learn how to force myself to stop and prepare myself for bed.

I also had set my own alarm clock, and actually got up when the alarm went off.

So I had to tidy up a little bit everyday to ensure that once it was time to leave the hotel, it [b]did not take my roommates and me an extra hour to clean up, - Try to use the same tense all the way through; also, avoid contractions like "didn't."

However, as a worker in the restaurant, I know that the customer is always right.

Good work; best of luck in your studies!

Thanks,

Sarah, EssayForum.com
OP Yeereina 4 / 4  
Sep 13, 2009   #3
Hi, is there any possibility to changing this to an anonymous posting?
It's an admissions essay, and I'd like to keep it private. Thanks!
EF_Sean 6 / 3,491  
Sep 14, 2009   #4
The whole idea of this site is that the everyone can read and comment on each other's work in a public forum. That way, people can learn from reading one another's essays and the feedback that has been given on them. If you are worried about being able to prove that the essay is your own work, make sure to sign up using your real name, so that anyone who comes to the site can see clearly that the work was yours, and learn when you posted it.
OP Yeereina 4 / 4  
Sep 24, 2009   #5
Is there anyway that it can be an anonymous posting? They can read the application--I just don't want my name attached to it.
EF_Simone 2 / 1,986  
Sep 24, 2009   #6
As you can see, only your user name is attached to your posting. If you want to be completely anonymous, make sure that your real name is not listed on the information about you as a user. But then, of course, you lose the ability to prove that you are the author of the work, should that ever come into question.
OP Yeereina 4 / 4  
Sep 27, 2009   #7
So is there anyway to change this? This shows up when it is googled, and I'd really like to hide it.


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