My first Q: where/what is UCF? UC Florida?
First para, too much about family points. nothing really about how it has affected you... points are strong. Ending of that para is ok.. selling yourself is nice. but keep out the sob story and explain how, more like tell how, it has changed you.
Since you mention mother in para 2, talk more about her. something that may be different from other applicants. she's your mom. your only mom.
But please, take that out. You're NOT going to school to please her. It's your own education and you're not putting that in good light.
If I received any grade lower than a B it was unacceptable in her eyes.
I like how it pops up in para two. New paragraph needed or information adjusted. And that's it. dancing ended. then random activities that have nada to do with the prompt. To make an analogy, you are dancing with Adcoms to get into their school/college/university. don't halt to an end with the question on hand and try to suck up to them. Won't work well, I promise you. I don't think stats helps all that much either.
Aside from education I've had an extreme passion