thanks for the advice!! =)
I've edited my response, attempting to make it more...interesting, and hopefully, well-written, is there any redundancy? how can i fix it? what else should i fix?
also, how can i make it flow smoothly? should i be more specific, by adding in an example somewhere...such as "I led my team to a win when...." etc**150 word limit! any advice is greatly appreciated!
My most meaningful commitment over the past four years has been running on the cross country team. I learned to set goals for myself and realized that I can only achieve if I willingly make sacrifices. I chose to change my lifestyle in order to be a better athlete and bring myself closer to my goals. Throughout my career, I enjoy the thrill of achieving each goal. I embrace the feelings of accomplishment and gratification that come along with the devotion that I put into it. My passion for running stems from its challenging nature, where hard work is always required. Running has become my source of meditation, as it allows me to escape into a peaceful and relaxed mindset. I truly appreciate that in cross country; perseverance and consistency are rewarded over time. My experiences throughout my cross country career have taught me that hard work is always rewarded.