I'm applying for an exchange program, could you please check this sop? It would be truly helpful if you give some advice on no matter grammar or structure.
With great enthusiasm and interest, I'm writing in applying for the position of Global Study Program in this fall quarter. I firmly believe that the attractive opportunity offered by *** can truly help me both in enhancing my academic study and expanding my horizon.
I made up my mind to go abroad for further study when I was a junior middle school student. For many years, this thought was never shaken. At present, as a sophomore in *** University, I think it's suitable time for me to experience this diverse world, and this program is so attractive in many aspects, thus, I'd like to exchange to *** in achieving my goal. The reasons are as follows.
Initially, *** provides a comfortable circumstance for studying. Located in the holy land of higher education-California , *** is an outstanding member among a large amount of world-renowned institutions. Although China is a country with remarkable history, I have to admit that she is still a tyro in business administration, the major I study, and a lot of classic theories and methods are introduced from the western. I believe that this program can offer a golden opportunity for me to understand these principles more deeply, and comprehend American commercial logic. Besides, thanks to the multiple curriculums, I can get access to some other fields I'm interested in, such as music theory, which are not available in my university
Secondly, it's a unique chance for me to improve English skills. Confronting with unstoppable globalization, using at least two languages fluently has been a basic requirement for the young, not only in academic fields. Nevertheless, due to the one-sided pattern of English teaching in China, although Chinese students are good at reading, most of us lack of listening and speaking capabilities. But it's no use criticizing, moving on is the only solution. In this program, I'll communicate with the native in real condition, writing papers in English format, focus on lectures in many accents. These practice can really boost my English ability, and build a strong foundation for future.
In addition, I can experience another glorious culture in person. For long periods, China see America as a mixture of enemy and friend, however, politic is only politic, as for me, nothing could be more exciting than feeling this miraculous mixture on my own, as an Chinese strategist Sun Tzu said, "Know the enemy and know yourself and you can fight a hundred battles with no danger of defeat". California is a great representative of American culture, no matter the cities, the urban and the natural landscapes. All of them are calling me to see them, to touch them, and to feel them by heart. I can't wait to take a photo with my new foreign friends in front of Golden Gate Bridge. I may be tormented by cultural shock, but newness is always better than everydayness.
Last but not least, I think this program can help me in making my career plan. I'm at the best age of my life, and there are so many unknown roads to take. A significant question I'm going to figure out is what I'm supposed to do in future. Everything seems charming, but everything seems dangerous. Maybe this exchange experience would show me a possible answer, or maybe not, but I need this three different months from my daily life to refresh my mind.
I'll be really honored if I was enrolled in this program. Thanks for your time and consideration.
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