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FUTURE OF CHINA'S ECONOMY; TRANSFER


lauman112233 5 / 14  
Mar 1, 2013   #1
It was due today and I was desperate for last min advice, thanks!
Why transfer and objectives wish to achieve

After conducting an in-depth research on Foxconn's suicide incident, I discovered my passion in China's labor economics. I would like to grasp the future of China's economy and contribute to its improvement. Although I love the connection offered by my small campus, I realized would not support my academic interest.

In Albright, economics courses on labor relationships and China are lacked. Despite their expertise in economics, economics professors were unfamiliar with labor economics. I was frustrated when none of the professors were able to help me to further elaborate my Foxconn research in a labor economics aspect. Also, the scope of Asian study in Albright is limited in the language aspect; social reform, public policies, and cultural aspects are not explored. By transferring to a bigger university, I wish to combine my interest in economics and China's social reform.

Apart from the lack of courses that fit my academic interest, Albright's rigid curriculum also prevented me from a liberal art education that I aspired, one that contains both breadth and depth in study. In Albright College, I did not limit my courses choice to economics and math. I believed a diversified knowledge base would provide me a comprehensive perspective when analyzing the economics dynamics. As a result, I added psychology as my second major as it teaches more about labor motivations and decision-making. I was surprised when the course Motivations is only offered to education majors. I was also disappointed when my registration on biology class was cancelled due to the lack of laboratories. I understand Albright is a small college; however I was still frustrated by the lack of course choices.

Another reason for transfer is Albright's insufficient research opportunities. Although my research project was luckily accepted, Albright's research program has only accepted fifteen proposals in the winter due to lack of funding. The school was unable to fund for my visit to Foxconn factory in Shenzhen. Believing a field study would benefit my research, I had no choice but to pay for the trip myself. Also, I gained access to only small amount of data. Fortunately, my helpful faculty partner provided me the database from his graduate school. I was fascinated by the rich resources in a bigger university and hoped to utilize it in enriching my research experience.

Despite Albright's curriculum did not fit me well, I still enjoyed the unified campus. The college offered great support in student activities and allowed me to start a new club. However, I was dissatisfied with the study atmosphere. I remembered a complete silence during a group discussion, and a group project completed by myself.

By transferring, I wish to achieve an exchange of knowledge and perspectives among an academically passionate campus. I also wish to contribute and bring impact to the community. In Reading, the poorest city in the States, I was unable to reach outside the campus. I saw the necessity of transferring in order to pursue academic excellence, a vibrant college experience, and involvement in society.
mascot92 1 / 2  
Mar 1, 2013   #2
I was frustrated when none of the professors were able to help me further elaborate my Foxconn research in a labor economics aspect.

Apart from the lack of courses that fit my academic interest, Albright's rigid curriculum also prevented me from a liberal art education that I aspired one, which contains both breadth and depth in study. In Albright College, I did not limit my course choices to economics and math.

I was also disappointed when my registration on biology class was canceled due to the lack of laboratories.

I understand Albright is a small college; however, I was still frustrated by the lack of course choices.

Believing a field study would benefit my research, I had no choice but to pay for the trip myself. In addition, I gained access to only small amount of data.

Despite Albright's curriculum did not fit me well; I still enjoyed the unified campus. The college offered great support in student activities and allowed me to start a new club. However, I was dissatisfied with the study atmosphere. I remember a complete silence during a group discussion, and a group remember by myself.
OP lauman112233 5 / 14  
Mar 1, 2013   #3
thank you so much for your help!!! is there any suggestion sob the content? Thx :)
Didgeridoo - / 306 191  
Mar 1, 2013   #4
It looks good to me. You should just elaborate more on why you are so interested in this new field of study, and what you hope to accomplish at a new school.
temberger93 3 / 12 1  
Mar 1, 2013   #5
I'd say try to give it a more positive tone. Based on what I've heard, colleges like stuff that is predominantly aspirational, and while criticism obviously makes sense (As you can't spend the whole essay saying how great your current school is as a reason for why you want to leave it), I think it helps you more if you talk about how much more you want to do as opposed to how little you were able to do at Albright.
formenthos 3 / 20 2  
Mar 12, 2013   #6
Interesting topic of focus.. but you're blaming your current institution... for what? Becuase they dont have info on Foxconn? Basically you're telling this transfer college, that they need to send you to Foxconn for a visit, they need to provide learning on China economics (which btw is moving to western economics, sooooo shoulndt you reaffirm your western economy marketability in light of the european and american market crashes?)

do not bash on your current institution. do not. you sound pathetic.

you're transfering, its a given that something has you unhappy, but this essay only tells us that you're pissed. it doesn't tell us who (we hope) you really are, your qualities, adn your goals... besides complaining...
OP lauman112233 5 / 14  
Mar 14, 2013   #7
I agree...thx for your advice...will modify immediately :)


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