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'My first instrument' - Common App Essay, Topic of my Choice, Music



BlessedHands23Threads: 4
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Author: Kraig Bisnott
   
Dec 22, 2009, 09:53pm   #1
Music has always been a love of mine. Like every other child, I started listening to music at a young age but it wasn't until I grew older that I found that I had a deep passion for it. Growing up in my home, I was always surrounded by music. My mother taught piano and my father had a deep love for music of the 'Soul' and 'RnB' genres and would constantly play them. Since my mother taught piano the house always had children with the similar interest in music that I had, or whose parents forced it upon them.

My first instrument was the recorder which I started to play at about the age of eight and was part of my church ensemble for about a year performing at various church events and services, but soon realized that it was not the instrument for me. I then found my knack for playing the piano at about the age of nine and began lessons with my mother. I would then take a yearly exam, administered by the Associated Board of The Royal School of Music (ABRSM), to assess my ability and determine whether or not I should go up a grade or repeat the current one. During my years of lessons I moved from Preparatory level to Grade 5 in piano and music theory and even skipped a grade. Now I play for recreation and stress relief and plan to one day continue my lessons and go the highest level.

Over the last two years I performed at various locations. My most memorable ones were my Grade 11 luncheon, my churches musical evening and most recently my father's funeral. When my father died, I found it hard at times to get things off my mind and when I would play the piano I would feel better. During the service there were various tributes given by various family members and since I found it hard to go up and speak I made my tribute in the form of an appropriate RnB genre piece and since then every time I think about him or am just feeling down I go to the piano and let my fingers do the talking. Music, especially piano, has impacted on my life greatly and I could not imagine going without it for even a day.



DemolitionXThreads: 4
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Dec 23, 2009, 08:52am   #2
lol Kraig it seems you took my advice and posted here. Kudos@

Music has always been a love of mine. Like every other child, I started listening to music at a young age but it wasn't until I grew older that I found that I had a deep passion for it. Growing up in my home, I was always surrounded by music. My mother taught piano and my father had a deep love for music of the 'Soul' and 'RnB' genres and would constantly play them. constantly played Soul and RnB music which he loved. Since my mother taught piano the house always had children with the similar interest in music that I had, or whose parents forced it upon them.

My first instrument was the recorder which I started to play at about the age of eight and was part of my church ensemble for about a year performing at various church events and services, but soon realized that it was not the instrument for me.Right here you should possibly put in something telling how/why you found this knack for piano. I then found my knack for playing the piano at about the age of nine and began lessons with my mother. I would then take took a yearly exam, administered by the Associated Board of The Royal School of Music (ABRSM), to assess my ability and determine whether or not I should go up a grade or repeat the current one. During my years of lessons I have moved from Preparatory level to Grade 5 in piano and music theory and even skipped a grade. At the same time, Now I play for recreation and stress relief and plan to one day harness my talent and attain the highest distinction.continue my lessons and go the highest level.

Over the last two years I performed at various locations including. My most memorable ones were my Grade 11 luncheon, my churches musical evening and most recently my father's funeral. When my father died, I found it hard at times to get things off my mind and when I would play the piano I would feel better. During the service there were various tributes given by various family members and since I found it hard to go up and speak I made my tribute in the form of an appropriate RnB genre piece and since then every time I think about him or am just feeling down I go to the piano and let my fingers do the talking. Music, especially piano, has impacted on my life greatly and a world without it would be...surrealI could not imagine going without it for even a day.

Good start, now to review and polish it. Good luck on your other essays as well!


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Dec 25, 2009, 09:32am   #3
Maybe it is better to write Rhythm & Blues instead of RnB.

Growing up in my home, I was always surrounded by music. This sentence is not really helpful... sort of slows the paragraph down. Sometimes taking out unhelpful sentences is like weeding a garden.

I see that Hakeem gave some good suggestions, too! And how about this awkward sentence:
My first instrument was the recorder, which I started to play at about the age of eight; this was the instrument I played as part of my church ensemble. I gained experience with it for about a year performing at various church events and services, but soon I realized that it was not the instrument for me.




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