I am applying to Boston university, Boston college, Bentley, bryant, Northwestern, northeastern, Pepperdine, Loyola marymount, San Diego, San Francisco, University of Virginia, Penn state.
Please give your opinion, and please tell me what chances i have in these colleges.
My Father - A great Influence
"You need not to make a mistake and learn from it; rather learn from the mistakes what others have made"
- Waseem SIddiqui
(My Father)
It's taken me nineteen years to realize what an extraordinary influence my father has been in my life. He's the kind of person who has thoughtful discussions about which artist he would most want to have his portrait painted by, the kind of father who always has time for his family and the kind of leader who is now heading a multinational company. Growing up with such a strong role model I have developed many of his enthusiasms. I have not only come to love the excitement of learning something new. I have also come to recognize the importance of giving something back to the community, in exchange for the sense of life, love and spirit offered.
My father's life journey has not been an easy one. He moved to Delhi, a big city, from a small town in India. Despite not being fluent in English, he was intelligent. He unsuccessfully applied for a job. His lack of language skill was the issue.
Rejection fuelled his passion for learning. Communication became his priority.
Success came from this burning desire. An example being some while later he interviewed the person who rejected him.
During my Sophomore year I remember explaining to my mother why I got less grades in math. It was the same way dad talks to put something into our heads.
I have come to value every interaction with him. He continually empowers me to learn something new about life, culture, family, and myself. With communication, comes the power of decision making. With any form of power comes responsibility.
While I treasure various his attributes which influenced me, my favorite is Responsibility.
In 2008 he was offered a career opportunity in Bangladesh. His leaving the family primarily made it feel like our leader was missing. As time progressed we adapted. As eldest son, I undertook the lead role. He gave me responsibility and authority. I was trusted to deliver when I was a Junior(High-school). I continued in the same manner as my dad.
I took note of everything and supported my mom and brother fully. I was like the CEO of the house and my dad - the chairman, sitting abroad. Although the position was often challenging, my dad guided me very well.
My unwitting errors of judgment sometimes disappointed him and he would be occasionally fierce with me. Conversely he would take my big blunders with a broken smile, asking me to be more careful next time.
He has always demonstrated his great skills of thought. I have had spectacular experiences in my life. His lead has enabled me to learn to truly value those occasions.
Before he left four years ago, I was always dependent on others. I asked for help continuously, making rash decisions. Growing maturity helped and changed my behavior. I became my own man, a positive which led to good in my life. I stopped asking for help unnecessarily. I became more understanding, and began making responsible decisions. Despite early challenges, my change of style was became positively acknowledged by those around me.
My dad has both indirectly and directly influenced me. In his endless love of everything and everyone he is touched by, I have seen a hope and life that is truly exceptional. Next year, I will find a new home, miles away.
However, Dad will always be by my side.
It's taken me nineteen years to realize what an extraordinary influence my father has been in my life. He's the kind of person who has thoughtful discussions about which artist he would most want to have his portrait painted by, the kind of father who always has time for his family and the kind of leader who is now heading a multinational company. Growing up with such a strong role model I have developed many of his enthusiasms. I have not only come to love the excitement of learning something new. I have also come to recognize the importance of giving something back to the community, in exchange for the sense of life, love and spirit offered.
1.takes
2.discussions? or vision, opinion
3."the kind of" is redundant
4.redundant, leave come alone
5.i fail to see the quality "give and take" from ur example; just because ur father is the leader of a multinational company?! PLS STATE THE REASON.
refer to the colleges. r u applying for undergraduate ?
Yes, i am applying for undergrad.
Thank you so much, I have noted your points well, will work on them and repost again by tonight.
