Hello, as part of application process for experience@singapore program, I have to write a 150-word essay on why I want to participate in this programme and what I hope to achieve by taking part. I have zeroed in on some points. But, I do not know how to start the essay. Any help?
Raj
India
A hundred and fifty words is not too hard, you can do it! Start with a strong first sentence, then just back it up. What is the main reason you want to be in this program? When did you become interested in it? What have you done like it? How will it benefit you in your future? Write anything, then send it back here and we'll have a look at your essay and help you along. Good luck!
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To start think about some noted aspects of the country and how those are things you wish to experience. Hope this helps.
i think you must express your own thinking to participate this program. good luck.
Any help in corrections?
I have revised it a bit.
Experience@singapore is an opportunity for me to get a first-hand experience of the work culture and the signature trait of Singapore - Multiculturalism. This will be my first exposure to international environment and a truly world-class city-state like Singapore will give me great understanding of international setting. Singapore promises high prospects of professional growth and ...
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I like to use a colon in a situation like this:
...of the work culture and the signature trait of Singapore: Multiculturalism.
That's a great theme!
This will be my first exposure to an international environment, and...
This is all very practical, but I still want to know... what are your short term goals? What is your ultimate goal? What can the reader get excited about?
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I have made a few more changes. Is it ok to have 154 words? I am not able to reduce 4 more words.
Experience@Singapore is an opportunity for me to get a worm's eye-view of the diverse work culture and the signature trait of Singapore: Multiculturalism. This will be my first exposure to an international environment and a truly world-class city-state like Singapore will give me great understanding of the international setting. My short-term goal is to find a position in a forward-moving company with solid performance and projections, ultimately leading to a prime managerial role in such a company. Singapore promises high prospects of professional growth and thus, I am looking forward to work there. Experience@Singapore is an opportunity to evaluate if I fit into work culture of the participating companies as many of them recruit from IIM-Bangalore. Professionals in Singapore have a balanced work-life and Experience@Singapore is a chance to get a glimpse of life after office hours. It is a great platform to meet IIM alumni and learn about the adaptive challenges of relocation.
Great enthusiasm, sophisticated sentence structure, it's excellent.
...prospects of professional growth, and thus I am looking forward to working there.---I moved a comma and added ing
It is a great platform to meet IIM alumni and learn about the adaptive challenges of relocation.
Okay, and how about making a better ending. This ending does not really leave an influential message. You can make an ending that leaves the reader thinking about something specific pertaining to your plan -- and the reason entering this programme now is an important part of your plan. When you have a clear, detailed plan for the future, no one wants to stand in the way.Everyone wants to you have opportunities to carry it out, because they're inspired by it.
