Could someone please provide feedback on my essay? The guidelines say maximum 500 words for two answers. This is just 1 answer.
Thanks in advance.
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Why did you choose to apply to UCF?
When I was young I always thought of college being distant from me. I never really thought of it as a pleasant experience, but rather a necessary step in life. As I grew up, I realized that I was developing a passion for challenge and hunger for knowledge. This soon led me to enroll into the IB Diploma program and opened my mind towards an international education. As such, I was determined to find a college abroad that suited my need for challenge and academic excellence. Fortunately, my IB Coordinator suggested me to take a look at the University of Central Florida.
UCF seemed to me as a dynamic and warm community. In fact, the endless activities and clubs held within the campus made me feel that there was a space for me in this big family. I immediately recognized my spot after finding that UCF had a Robotics Club. Along with the club, the Electrical and Computer Science faculty's webpage showcased many of the projects that were being run. I felt aligned with the faculty's projects and knew, for real, that this was no coincidence; UCF had to be my school. Additionally, UCF's fine reputation in academic excellence made me want to apply for an accelerated BS + MS degree, knowing that, taking into account the university's prestige, this is a worthy investment.
In the end, I have come to realize that attending UCF might be my best shot into fulfilling my academic expectations, and furthermore, a stimulating and truly pleasant experience.
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