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During the first nine months of my junior year, I volunteered at Palomar Pomerado Hospital as a student intern in the Intermediate Care Department. Ever since the fifth grade, my dream has been to go to medical school. Therefore, I wanted to take the initiative and familiarize myself with the inner-workings of the hospital system. However, my first day at the hospital was horrible.
I had not received any training or orientation for this position, and I felt lost. I watched the clock, evaded the nurses, dodged the other volunteers and pretended I was helping when actually I was doing nothing. I hid from the medical staff and avoided the patients. The thought of volunteering for the next nine months loomed in my head, and I wondered how I would survive if all the shifts were going to be like my first. To end my despair, I sought the advice of my fellow volunteers, who seemed to be working diligently their entire four-hour shifts. I was surprised when they told me they enjoyed volunteering and were having fun talking to the patients.
I asked them to show me the ropes. They taught me how to interact with the patients, administer medication (I though an intern couldn't do that! But I maybe wrong;;;), change bedding, and assist at mealtimes What did you do to assist, elaborating on this would not hurt, if you are not over the word limit that is.... With training came confidence and a sense of commitment. I went into the storage room and memorized the location of items such as towels, ointments, toothbrushes, and water cups. I was able to efficiently dispense the needed materials to patients and nurses. I also went to every room, making sure that the patients' heart monitors and IV fluids were in place. Every hour, I measured blood pressure, oxygen saturation levels, temperature, and pain level, updating the information with the patients' assigned nurses.
Most importantly, I started to talk with the patients, who were mostly elderly. Sometimes I sat with the patients for hours as they shared stories of their careers, families, successes, and regrets. I found myself looking forward to my Saturday afternoon shifts.
During the internship, I learned that by being proactive and finding the courage to ask for help, I could create an opportunity to be fully engaged in all aspects of my life. This lesson will be with me forever and has already paid huge dividends - Wrong Word Choice. I have been promoted to leadership positions at school and in my youth group. Academically, my overall performance and mastery of material has improved because I seek personal interactions with my teachers. Being assertive has made me a better person and will make me a better physician. My commitment to study(?) medicine has been confirmed and strengthened by my internship experience. A little awkward, but gets the idea through