shalini singh: I also feel somehow this essay doesn't imply what is asked to do.
Hi Shalini, I think you mean that you feel it does not achieve what it is asked to achieve.
Imply means something different.
Well, it asks you to tell about an important and difficult decision. The decision became a problem, because it was important and difficult to make.
Life is full of challenges, to overcome these challenges proper decision making ability at
adequate timing is the most important thing to do. This kind of general statement in the beginning weakens the essay. Make a specific statement at the beginning... maybe you should say something a little SHOCKING to get the reader's attention.
I remember a situation in which I had to make a decision which was not easy at that time. No need to say this, because we know you will be writing about a decision.
Hey, your second paragraph is very good. I think you should chop off the first paragraph.
I am very sure that they wanted me to learn by from my experiences.
I was welcomed and also appreciated for my this decision of having a teaching as a career for my self.
to pursue a teaching career.
Write more about what made the decision so difficult, and you will have achieved what they asked you to achieve. :-)
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