my edited essay!
Dentistry is a scrupulous art that draws from the intricacies of physiology and anatomy. The brushes can range from the slender drill to the broad bird beaks. The paints must be carefully chosen to veil any evidence of restoration. The tooth is a sculpture, carefully carved to blend in with the rest of its environment. Dentistry, the perfect blend of science and art, has become something I undoubtedly want to pursue.
Truthfully, I found dentistry because I couldn't afford, in terms of money and resources, to research at an institute or volunteer at a distant hospital. My oldest brother had always been pushing me to pursue dentistry because of the financial stability and flexible hours the profession offered. As the last child and only girl of the family, I knew my brother's intentions were pure, but I would never choose a career for the sole purpose of making money. If I have to do something for fifty years, then I want a job that requires an array of interdisciplinary skills and challenges me to adapt. Before, I perceived dentistry as monotonous and thankless job.
I was convinced to shadow a dentist for one day on the premise that I could at the least gain some experience in a health care office. I intended only to stay the first day, but I have ended up shadowing extensively for 5 months now. On the first day, I basically memorized a speech for my meeting with Dr. Gonzalez to avoid lapsing into silence at any questions directed towards me, but nowadays, the interaction with patients has taught me the fine technique of formal and improvised conversations. My mentor, Dr. Gonzalez, earnestly explains every question I have, from dealing with uncooperative patients to illustrating the fine details of orthodontic brackets. Along every step into this world of dentistry, I found a new aspect that seems to mirror my own personality and preferences. There is so much to learn at all times, and as a resident of the ever-changing technological age, I greatly appreciate how dentistry is constantly shifting to accommodate new applications and techniques. The direct results of dentistry connect me to the people where I volunteer on a personal level and keep me motivated.
Dentistry is an art that has captivated both my soul and mind, and I am keen to explore this field of endless learning wherever it may take me.
the only thing that really changed was the part of the first and all of the last paragraph..