I know you mention it a bit later in the essay, but the first sentence about anime is rendered irrelevant throughout the essay. Because it's not a strong theme in the essay, you could just start out by saying "
I've witnessed a lot of drama in my life, from tears over break ups to friends betraying friends, but I've never been involved with drama personally. "
These sentences should be combined:
I wasn't sure if it was due to my ignorance, unconcern, or carefree lifestyle. So I decided to test this out.
And although unconcern is a word, it's just a very awkward diction choice. I would switch it with something like "
indifference " or "
apathy ." Also the spot where it's used in the sentence after this.
I got a little confused at the beginning-you go from saying you're never involved with drama, but you're not sure why. Then, "
I realized the secret to avoiding social drama. " But you just said you've never been involved except for one time? I'm not exactly sure what you were trying to get at, but maybe if you switched "avoiding" to "resolving" it would get your message across clearer (if that's what you meant).
You also said that the issue on the team was with everybody and for various reasons, but then later say that you tried to be honest to avoid misunderstandings. It's unclear how the conflict between the team was a misunderstanding due to you not being honest.
There's a couple words that get repetitive throughout the essay-drama, shy, misunderstandings, etc.
I like how you speak of the tension building up inside of you before you spoke, and how you clearly indicate your emotions during this experience and how it changed you.
Other than that, there's just some simple capitalization errors and simple grammar mistakes that you'll pick up on once you read through. Try reading it aloud too!
Good luck! I hope this helped a little.