Topic A: Write an essay in which you tell us about someone who has made an impact on your life and explain how and why this person is important to you.
As late as this summer I considered myself to be undiscovered. My mind was always abuzz with a daunting list of careers which I would eventually have to choose from. But I knew there was some little known talent inside me, hidden somewhere in the uncharted darkness that is my mind. It took a truly inspirational person to shine the light on me that would ultimately help me recognize my talents. That person was Michael, my director at my summer internship at the City Hall. Michael was a newly minted college graduate, who had just recently become employed by the City in the management information services (MIS) department and he was the epitome of what I wanted to become in life. Successful, young, and wealthy.
It took me a few weeks to truly open up to Michael, but we quickly became great friends. Michael had a very straight-forward working attitude, he always chose to finish tasks as soon as they arrived, instead of procrastinating, of which I was a culprit of myself. Michael also made sure to do things right the first time, unlike some of the other coworkers who were satisfied by the simple "quick fix" Michael made sure that his work would be long lasting and of the highest quality. I quickly learned from Michael, and began paying much more attention to deadlines, making sure to finish work as soon as it was given to me. I also became less focused on artlessly finishing things, and instead made sure that I paid attention to detail and went above and beyond expectations.
Besides affecting my key work ethics, Michael also changed the way that I think about life after high school. Being the community manager at the (MIS) department for the City of Farmers Branch was Michaels dream job, and he urged me to discover mine. He advised me not too chose a career based on dollar signs, but instead, something that I had a passion for and something I can see myself doing for ten, or twenty, or even thirty years. Being a naïve 17 year old, I took that advice with a grain of salt, but now that I look back on the end of my internship, I really know I wouldn't have the patience to be in a career that I don't enjoy. With Michael's advice, I have discovered my passion in international business and political science, a career that allows me to interact and do business with distant cultures.
Now almost three months after my wonderful internship experience, I continue to keep in touch with Michael as he makes sure that I am staying on the right path. Since my summer experiences I have kept translating what I learned into my daily life in school, and I can proudly say this has had a profound change in how I complete my work. Michael has allowed me to be a more creative individual in finding something that I enjoy doing. He has helped me open my eyes to other opportunities and I can gladly say without him I would still be lost and undiscovered.
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"It took me a few weeks to truly open up to Michael, but we quickly became great friends"
isn't that kind of a contradiction? and i would add something unselfish to the list of things that you saw in micheal, just because it reflects better on you, you know?
and lastly "Michael, my director at my summer internship" wouldn't it sound better "... the director at my summer..." other then those small things it was pretty good, congrats.
