Well, i didn't get the SAT score i need. SO i'm relying on this essay to help me.
My educational goals are to attend a superior university which will assist me in accomplishing my later goals in life. I hope to become a computer scientist or computer engineer and will strive to bring changes into the society that we live in today, and for the future generations to come. To help me accomplish these goals, I plan to work as hard the hardest I can in school and out of school. I will study as hard as I can in school because I know deep down that at the end of hard work is success. I have the ability in this life to make my dream become reality.
My life-long career goal is to become a computer scientist or engineer, someone capable of improving and working with something that has revolutionized the world, computers. I plan to obtain a bachelor's degree in a major in the computer field. I want to work for, or even own a company that produces computer hardware, or a computer repair service. There will always be a need for computers as they are one of the largest resources and most dependable/useful today.
I chose computer science or computer engineering simply because I love to work with computers. I've grown up with computers my whole life. Every day after school I would come home jolting to my room to simply play with the computer. I am passionate about this major because I know it is something that I am talented and experienced with, and I love to mess with computers.
Jobs are available to computer scientists Career-wise; I will have engineering, IT, support, and management, even sales and marketing with a degree in Computer Science or Computer Engineering. Any sort of those jobs will always be in demand since computers are rapidly evolving at an alarming rate. New technology with computers grows year by year, thus creating more jobs. This will make it a touch easier to get a job that pays well when I am finished getting my Bachelor's degree.
The essay is simple and straightforward but in parts it got too wordy. Like here:
To help me accomplish these goals, I plan to work as hard the hardest I can in school and out of school. I will study as hard as I can in school because I know deep down that at the end of hard work is success.
I get it, you plan to work hard to become successful.
I didn't really become attached to your story. I don't know what the prompt was asking but it didn't make me feel anything. I would expand on the 4th paragraph though, I thought that stood out the most to me. I want to know more about your passion for computers.
