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Common App Extracurricular Essay - 150 words or fewer.



dhruvsharmaThreads: 3
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Author: Dhruv Dutt Sharma
   
Dec 30, 2008, 10:08pm   #1
In the space provided below, please elaborate on one of your activities (extracurricular, personal activities, or work experience)(150 words or fewer).


From early childhood, my strong sense of rhythm and fascination with beats, led me to try out different percussion instruments. I started with the "Tabla",a unique Indian Congo-like instrument which I thoroughly enjoyed playing for all our School events. However I felt my expression limited to a certain genre of music, which diversified at best to fusion.

From there it was a natural progression to my Drum-set. The versatility of the different components-the crash, bass-drum, toms, all gave me an almost unlimited freedom to express myself. I loved the feeling of performing gigs - at schools, restaurants, stadiums - making hundreds of people sway to my beats. Getting critical reviews in news-papers also encouraged me to hone up my act.

But even as I continue drumming, my fascination with beats has led me to another dimension of creative expression - Dancing. Call it Hip Hop, B-Boying or Breaking.

In short, rhythm defines me.



TootleyThreads: 5
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Dec 30, 2008, 10:13pm   #2
From early childhood, my strong sense of rhythm and fascination with beats, has led me

all gave me an almost unlimited freedom to express myself.

stadium! wow. Maybe you should talk more about that, but the response is really good and it flows well.


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Author: Daniel Sacks
   
Dec 30, 2008, 10:26pm   #3
The versatility of the different components - the crash, bass-drum, toms, etc - all gave me an almost unlimited freedom to express myself.


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Author: Henry Lin
   
Dec 30, 2008, 10:28pm   #4
"However I felt my expression was limited to a certain genre of music, which diversified at best to fusion."

"From there it was a natural progression to my Drum-set"

"But even as I continue drumming, my fascination with beats has led me to another dimension of creative expression - Dancing. Call it Hip Hop, B-Boying or Breaking.

I don't think "drum", "dancing", "hip hop", and "breaking" should be in capitalized.

Nice short response.


dhruvsharmaThreads: 3
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Author: Dhruv Dutt Sharma
   
Dec 30, 2008, 10:30pm   #5
I would love to talk about my experiences, maybe even elaborating on some of my gigs, but its only a 150 words :( thanks for the grammar check though, just slipped my mind

:)
However I felt my expression was limited to a certain genre of music, which diversified at best to fusion

Thanks the sentence sounds so much better.


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Dec 31, 2008, 08:45pm   #6
From early childhood, my strong sense of rhythm and fascination with beats led me to try out different percussion instruments. I started with the "Tabla," a unique Indian Congo-like instrument which I thoroughly enjoyed playing for all our School events. However I felt my expression was limited to a certain genre of music, which diversified at best to fusion.

From there it was a natural progression to my drum set. The versatility of the different components-the crash, bass-drum, toms, all gave me an almost unlimited freedom to express myself. I loved the feeling of performing gigs - at schools, restaurants, stadiums - making hundreds of people sway to my beats. Getting critical reviews in news-papers also encouraged me to hone up my act.

Feels like it needs one more sentence at the end! (below)

But even as I continue drumming, my fascination with beats has led me to another dimension of creative expression - Dancing. Call it Hip Hop, B-Boying or Breaking. In short, rhythm defines me.

Good luck with your music! You seem to write with rythm, too.




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