the limit is 150 words and i've got 149 already...
The National Flag was rising, and here I was, proudly singing March of the Volunteers on Tiananmen Square, anticipating the start of China's 60th Anniversary.
As a volunteer background performer, my job was to switch 48 pictures simultaneously with 100,000 others during the two-hour performance. Despite the sweltering weather, my partners and I had trained almost every day from seven till noon for over three months. For a better effect, we composed jingles to remember the picture order, counted the duration of each image, and even invented tools to fix the unstable property. Though the hard practice and innumerable rehearsals sometimes exhausted me, the thought of contributing to my motherland's anniversary in person would always fill me with infinite vigor and excitement.
"March on! On!" the ending climax indicated the beginning of the formal ceremony. Three. Two. One. Presenting the first image, I murmured from my heart, "Happy birthday, China!"
Briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences, 150 words or below.
Wait, 60th? China is the country China right, so are you sure it's 60th, not 600th, or even 6000th
Wait, 60th?
It is true that China is a country with culture of long standing. But what mentioned in the essay is the 60th anniversary of the founding of the People's Republic of China.
Hi.
This is indeed an unique experience. Maybe you can squeeze in somewhere why this experience is significant to you, but with or without it your essay is great!
G L~
Though the hard practice and innumerable rehearsals sometimes exhausted me, the thought of contributing to my motherland's anniversary in person would always fill me with infinite vigor and excitement.---- I would like to see this sentence replaced with a sentence that somehow connects this essay to your career goals.
:-) I like this example! You are adding a cool cultural element to EssayForum.
Happy Birthday, China!
she meant the anniversary of "People's Republic of China" , not the Ching or Ming dynasty here
After reviewing it with my friends and teachers, we think it does not reveal who i am. So I will write about another activity. Thank you all!
