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Chemistry Major-UC Prompt #1 Transfer Student


ashtene 2 / 3  
Nov 29, 2009   #1
CHEMISTRY MAJOR

Please critique and tell me if there's anything wrong or anything i need to add, etc.
Also does it answer the prompt?

The most vivid memory of my childhood is possibly going to the Pharmacy frequently. From the age of two all the way to my freshman year in high school, I suffered from a terrible disease called asthma. Every time I had trouble breathing or my asthma would start acting up, my mom would take me to the Pharmacy to get some medications. The Pharmacist would always tell my mom directions for taking the medication, how long to take, and if there are any side effects. After countless visits and seeing the Pharmacist do his job, it inspired me to be just like him. It made me want to be the person behind the desk handing out medication to help people get better.

As I got into college, my passion for becoming a Pharmacist started to go downhill. Instead of making the most of my education to become what I wanted to be, I took advantage of the freedom I had that I didn't have in high school. Because of this, it caused me to rethink my goal in life. I still wanted to become a Pharmacist, but after speaking with a counselor he said it was best for me to get my Bachelor's degree in Science, so that I have something to fall back on just in case. As a result, I proposed to major with a Bachelor of Science in Chemistry, since many of the classes fulfilled the pre-requisites for Pharmacy school as well. Since deciding to major in Chemistry, my excitement for becoming a Pharmacist has increased tremendously. I found an interest for Chemistry I never knew I had. Every semester I seem more eager to attend Chemistry class than any other class. I find it interesting how many chemical elements are named after scientists. I've never dreamed of becoming a scientist, but since choosing to major in Chemistry and experimenting with different chemicals, I see myself becoming one. I find every aspect of Chemistry interesting and would like to continue exploring new concepts of Chemistry.

For the past year and a half, I have been doing volunteer work at my mom's clinic. Since volunteering, I've developed a fair understanding of what goes on inside the workplaces of clinics, hospitals, and pharmacies. While completing tasks such as filing paperwork, centrifuging blood work, ordering materials, and maintaining a safe and clean environment, I've found the work to be rewarding. I feel by doing volunteer work has prepared me for the real world. Although, I still have more to learn and training to do, this a start of something I am looking forward to do.
linmark 2 / 328 7  
Nov 30, 2009   #2
For the first half of your essay, I was confused thinking Pharmacology was your intended major. I believe it is only possible to do this in grad school - and that you would need to qualify with a Chemistry major. So wouldn't it make sense for you to flip around your essay and talk about your love for Chemistry upfront?


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