"Risk anything! Care no more for the opinions of others, for those voices. Do the hardest thing on earth for you. Act for yourself. Face the truth" as quoted by Katherine Mansfield. Coming from a poor family of four; a single mother, an elder sister and a younger brother and a poor village where the major occupation is peasant farming which ninety-nine percent of its populace were illiterate. Securing funds for formal education was intricate so children are uneducated like their parents. They resort to helping their parents on their small farms, which earn them a living. While, I was from a family where my mother was an illiterate and employed as a peasant farmer with no funds to send us to school, I decided to find a way of getting myself educated.
Convincing her about the decision of going to school was quite tedious. She agreed to pay a part of my school fees. I started school after tirelessly getting my educational materials together. My mother was worried that I may drop out due to lack of funds to support me. I spent more time after school on the farm supporting my mother and had little time to learn and do my assignments. I mostly finish them on my way to school the next day.
After so many years of continuous vicissitudes and an outstanding performance in my basic level examinations, I gained admission into the senior high school with the help of a family friend who was in the city and they offered to take care of my needs and higher education. I moved to stay with them in the city. My foster parents indeed provided me with everything I need and provide some things my family in the village needs. After four years of High School education, I graduated with excellent grades. I realized how my mother's fears of failure have turn into a success story. After all these struggles and determination, I realized I have not only been equipped with just the dexterity of knowing how to write, read and speak good English but has provided a large platform for me take new risks, open up to new challenges, ideas and how to face them squarely. Secondly, it has provided me the chance to educate parents and children in my village of the benefits of getting educated no matter their sexes, children to make it a dream to aspire higher and be ready to take risks if they want to succeed rather than becoming illiterate peasant farmers like our parents. Excepting educating people on the importance of getting educated, this opportunity has helped me to explore many aspects of my life pertaining to my weaknesses, strengths, abilities among others. When I look at how I can think, evaluate and create solutions to problems without having to consult or wait for them to get worse, then I know it is the ability of taking a risk, a good and caring mother and a Good Samaritan.
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I'm really impressed by your experiences.But you address your experiences too objectively.I think most people want to see something personal,something subjective in you essay.You says a lot about what you have done and experienced,but you rarely tell the reader how you felt.Like when you educated the children,how did you feel,proud?because of what?And when you went to live with your foster parents,how did you feel at first,miserable probably,and then what made you gradually turned to love your new life with new people?I'm just guessing but what I want to say is that it's better to conclude more details and personal stuff in you essay.
