Biotech, Dhirubhai Ambani Rural Entrepreneurship (DARE) Young Professional

Hello freinds i am new this forum. Just today i come to know about this and cant stop myself from joining. I hope i'll get help from this and i'm sure i'll also contribute to this forum in future..

Programme is as follow

Dhirubhai Ambani Rural Entrepreneurship (DARE) Young Professional.
- DARE Young Professionals Program is a flagship program of Reliance Foundation aimed at getting the best of talent from Agriculture Universities and Social Sciences Institutions to work for villages under Reliance Foundation.

i am applying for this but i thought it would be better to check my SOP/ cover letter.
Its my first time to write a SOP so i hope there'll be lot of sugestions..

I Parag Kolekar a post-graduate in BIOTECHNOLOGY from Shivaji University, Kolhapur.(JUNE 2009) I have completed one year P.G. Diploma in Bioinformatics from Shivaji University, Kolhapur. (July 2009) and Post M.Sc. Diploma in Genetic Engineering and Bioprocess Development at M.S. University, Baroda (July 2010). Presently I am working in DNA fingerprinting and hybridity testing lab as a Biotechnologist, Pune.

Right now I am preparing for GRE . I am seeking for Phd scholarship. But when i came across this advertisement it changed my mind. I want get in this DARE YP Programme because i always want to work on grass root level that is for farmers. Yet i am not from genuine farmer family background but i know the problems of them since my childhood. My uncles are farmers.We were joint family til last 5 years . Since then my father (Retired bank employee) took charge of the farm. We are still facing the problems yet we are educated , capable of understanding the rules and system. This makes me worry, what about those farmers who don't know to how to face the system? I want to enfranchise them about agricultural benefits. My ultimate goal is is to create platform where villagers can benefit from farming so that it would help them to enhance their living standard not only in terms of money but also education health.

My associations with these institutes, co-curricular & extracurricular activities have further enhanced my communication skills. I have no doubt that opportunity at DARE YP programme and Reliance Foundation's business will meet the criteria of intellectual rigor that I have set for myself, for my education, and for those I have promised to serve.

Hi Parag! Welcome to EF.

I am Parag Kolekar, a post-graduate student in Biotechnology from Shivaji University, Kolhapur (June 2009). I have completed one year P.G. Diploma in Bioinformatics from Shivaji University, Kolhapur. (July 2009) and Post M.Sc. Diploma in Genetic Engineering and Bioprocess Development at M.S. University, Baroda (July 2010). Presently I am working in DNA fingerprinting and hybridity testing lab as a Biotechnologist, Pune. (Right here, add a sentence that has your THEME).

Do you know what I mean? The first paragraph needs a sentence that tells the theme of the essay, the main idea you want the reader to remember about you.

Also, I think you should add a paragraph topic sentence to the beginning of this paragraph:
(Add a topic sentence to tell the reader the main idea of this paragraph.) Right now I am preparing for GRE . I am seeking for Phd scholarship. But when I came across ...

Yet i I am not from a genuine farmer family background, but I know the...

Capitalize "I"

We were joint family until five years ago.

Since then my father (a retired bank employee) took charge of the farm.

My ultimate goal is is to create platform where villagers can benefit from farming so that it would help them to enhance their living standard not only in terms of money but also education and health.----Excellent sentence!

The last sentence of the essay is very good, too!

Most importantly, add those sentences I discussed above.
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