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bilal ABUZENAHThreads: 15 Posts: 121 Author: billy H.s	Oct 24, 2009, 04:50pm #1
small part..........I'm looking for mistake please help find some. My best teacher I have ever had was my ESL teacher, Paul Thomas, he was the funniest person I had known in my life. his class was fun and interesting. he was helpful, knowledgeable, and funny at the same time. Paul helped me in many situations, I still remembered, when he came with me to the court room to help me to understand what the judge was saying. Also when I came here I started looking for job; wherever I went, they asked me for a resume, in that time, I didn't even know what does resume mean. I told him about that, he said"I'D be happy to help you.

angie127Threads: 12 Posts: 72 Author: Angelica Cygan	Oct 24, 2009, 05:46pm #2
Choose a particular experience, probably the courtroom one, in which your teacher helped you and elaborate on it. Also, avoid run-on sentences such as bilal ABUZENAH: My best teacher I have ever had was my ESL teacher, Paul Thomas, he was the funniest person I had known in my life. Rewrite it to: My best teacher was my ESL teacher, Paul Thomas. He was the funniest person I had known in my life.

bilal ABUZENAHThreads: 15 Posts: 121 Author: billy H.s	Oct 24, 2009, 07:17pm #3
whats about this one? My best teacher was my ESL teacher, Paul Thomas. He was the funniest person I had known in my life. his class was fun and interesting. he was helpful, knowledgeable, and funny at the same time. Paul helped me in many situation, I still remembered that day when I had a car accident and I must go to to court. In that time, I did not had any body to help me, furthermore I did not speak English well, there were just two days remain to the court date. What I should do, I had no idea. While I was in school, I thought about telling my teacher about it, might be he would give some advices. I was stunned when he told me I will come with you to the court. We went there in his car; he did not let me bay for the parking meter.

angie127Threads: 12 Posts: 72 Author: Angelica Cygan	Oct 24, 2009, 07:39pm #4
My best teacher was my ESL teacher, Paul Thomas. ~~He was the funniest person I had known in my life.~~ his class was fun and interesting. he was helpful, knowledgeable, and funny at the same time. **don't say that he's funny twice Paul helped me in many situations. I still remembered the day ~~when~~ I had a car accident and I had go to to court. In that time, I did not have any body to help me. Furthermore, I did not speak English well. Two days before the court day, I was still unsure what to do. While I was in school, I thought about telling my teacher about it; maybe he would give some advices. I was stunned when he told me he'd accompany me to court. We drove there in his car; he did not let me bay for the parking meter. It's a good start. I think you can still add some details. how did he help you? what was the result of the court? what would have happened if he hadn't helped you? you should also add detail about his classes. why were they fun? what was his teaching method? i hope this helps.

EF_StephenThreads: - Posts: 273 Author: Stephen, EssayForum.com	Oct 24, 2009, 08:10pm #5
This definitely needs more details. Although it is about your teacher, and your praise is worthy, giving specific examples lets us see him better, more like you do. I think that will help a lot.

bilal ABUZENAHThreads: 15 Posts: 121 Author: billy H.s	Oct 25, 2009, 12:20am #6
please help me find mistakes. please, please. My best teacher ... SEE BELOW

zelong430Threads: 2 Posts: 5 Author: Zelong Qiu	Oct 25, 2009, 12:39am #7
bilal ABUZENAH: His class was really fun, many students like to be in his class. I would mention that he was a comedian beside his teaching career.Therefore, he used his humor sense to explain many things, there is some words difficult to memorize, so he used to put them in a jokes that we will never forget. This technique worked very well to all of the classmates i think this paragraph is unnecessary you have give enough imformation about your teacher. Funny isn't important and essienial in this essay i think.

mmmargaritaThreads: 10 Posts: 122 Author: Maretta Fan	Oct 25, 2009, 01:30am #8
"his class was fun and interesting. he was helpful, knowledgeable, and funny at the same time." Show, don't tell! If you have more room to work with, give examples of this. Or perhaps, you should take this bit out and replace it with something more related to the rest of your paragraph. The introduction can be about how he was always willing to help out and lend a hand, etc. By the way, what is the prompt?

bilal ABUZENAHThreads: 15 Posts: 121 Author: billy H.s	Oct 25, 2009, 02:19am #9
thanks for the comments. : write about your best teacher. I'M still working on it his class was fun and interesting. he was helpful, knowledgeable, and funny at the same time Examples he was helpful Paul helped me in many situations.....to the end of the paragraph. his class was fun and interesting His class was really fun.......to the end of the paragraph knowledgeable if you have any Idea thats would be great WHAT should THE CONCLUSION be about?

bilal ABUZENAHThreads: 15 Posts: 121 Author: billy H.s	Oct 25, 2009, 09:37am #10
I'm still working on it..........pleas may check #6 for me

bilal ABUZENAHThreads: 15 Posts: 121 Author: billy H.s	Oct 29, 2009, 02:01pm #11
please help me with this. My best teacher ....Once again he is my best teacher. SEE BELOW

EF_KevinThreads: 33 Posts: 14,204 Author: You can help a lot of people by visiting the "Unanswered" threads! [Moderator]	Oct 31, 2009, 05:17pm #12
Really he is the best teacher, I have ever seen. ----> this sentence is not so good. You already explained that he is a great teacher, and you did a great job explaining it! He must have dne a great job helping you learn English!! But replace that sentence with a sentence that captures the main idea of your essay. ...give some advice. "Advice" is like "water." You don't have to add s. Oh, that last paragraph is no good!! Don't keep saying he is your best teacher. Only say it once. In fact, don't say it at all; in writing, we say, "Show, don't tell." That means you should rely on the examples instead of stating facts simply. You did do a great job of explaining why he is so great. Maybe the last paragraph should tell about how he is a great teacher AND a great person.

bilal ABUZENAHThreads: 15 Posts: 121 Author: billy H.s	Oct 31, 2009, 05:37pm #13
thanks a lot EF_Kevin.

byflashThreads: 2 Posts: 13	Oct 31, 2009, 05:46pm #14
We drove there in his car; he did not let me bay for the parking meter. We drove there in his car; he did not let me pay for the parking meter. (?)

bilal ABUZENAHThreads: 15 Posts: 121 Author: billy H.s	Oct 31, 2009, 08:25pm #15
thank you guys........ could this one be my conclusion? He is such a good person; I say it without any doubt. He always smiling and looks happy, you can tell that from his face. Even out side of the school, he volunteers in a lot of community activities like, help the elderly people and cleaning the parks. I hope one day to be like him, and I wish that all of instructors would be like him.

bilal ABUZENAHThreads: 15 Posts: 121 Author: billy H.s	Nov 5, 2009, 09:46pm #16
My best teacher was my ESL teacher, Paul Thomas. His class ... SEE BELOW

EF_KevinThreads: 33 Posts: 14,204 Author: You can help a lot of people by visiting the "Unanswered" threads! [Moderator]	Nov 6, 2009, 09:48pm #17
This is so much better!! Great job.

bilal ABUZENAHThreads: 15 Posts: 121 Author: billy H.s	Nov 6, 2009, 10:00pm #18
thanks a lot for your help........

bilal ABUZENAHThreads: 15 Posts: 121 Author: billy H.s	Nov 9, 2009, 05:17pm #19
My best teacher was my ESL teacher, Paul Thomas. His class was fun and interesting. He was helpful, knowledgeable, and funny at the same time. We were like a family in his class, helping each other, doing a lot of things together. Mr. Thomas helped me in many situations. I still remember the day when I had a car accident and I had to go to court. At that time, I did not have anybody to help me. Furthermore, I did not speak English well. Two days before the court day, I was still unsure what to do. While I was in school, I thought about telling my teacher about it, maybe he would give some advice. I was stunned when he told me he'd accompany me to court. We drove there in his car; he did not let me pay for the parking meter. We went into the court room; I had already explained everything to him. The judge asked me some question that I misunderstood, but fortunately, my best teacher was beside me, simplified the questions for me and clarified my answers to the judge. In the end, the case was dismissed. I would have lost the case if he hadn’t been with me. If that did happen, I would have had to pay two thousand dollars. I didn’t have not half of it at that time. Besides he had done many things to us, like filling applications, fixing resumes and sometimes some students brought him letters that difficult to them to understand and he would help them to understand it. His class was really fun; many students from other classes liked to be in his class. Sometimes he used his sense of humor to explain many things. As example, if there were some words difficult to memorize, he would put them in jokes that we would not easily forget. This technique worked very well for me and my classmates. He used new material every time we met, so his class was really fun. He was such a good person; I say it without any doubt. He was always smiling and looked happy. You could tell that from his face. Even out side of the school, he volunteered in a lot of community activities like helping the elderly people and cleaning the parks. I hope one day to be like him, and I wish that all of instructors would be like him.

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