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'Being a product of my environment' - Florida State essay VIRES


austin13 2 / 2  
Oct 12, 2009   #1
For almost one hundred years, the Latin words, "Vires, Artes, Mores" have been the guiding philosophy behind Florida State University. Vires signifies strength of all kinds - moral, physical, and intellectual; Artes alludes to the beauty of intellectual pursuits as exemplified in skill, craft, or art; and Mores refers to character, custom, or tradition. Describe how one or more of the values embodied in these concepts are reflected in your life.

Vires is the moral, mental, and physical strength to act with confidence, advancing our state, our nation, and our world; for vires to be as strong as they are you have to have skills. Skills are developed through complete immersion, discovery, and appreciation of the arts, humanities, sciences, and the professions. A skilled individual cannot be too skilled without character. Character begins with compassion, respect, and a deep sense of social responsibility. A young individual with these torches will be sure to have a successful life, from a higher education to powerful position in the career field.

As a seventeen-year-old female, almost one year away from my high school graduation, I am a product of my environment; all three torches resign in side me, and will help me with me soon to be adult life. As a varsity basketball player I have to have strength to face my different opponents, mentally and physically. Basketball and all other sports are more than just being physical; you have to be mentally prepared to able to take upon anything that comes your way. Schoolwork, careers, sports, music, and all other activities have to be done with confidence, so much confidence that will help you into helping our state, our nation, and our world.

Vires is the strength in us we need to become better citizens, but you have to have artes in order to have the confidence in yourself, that you can and will be the best in the state, nation, or even world. Artes are developed through and appreciated through me begin a student athlete, I have to appreciate the art of the game, as if it is my profession because it shows my competitiveness towards myself, and a situation that is set in front of me. My skills are not only expressed through basketball, but through my work in the classroom, and outside of school. How I us my skill is how I get in contact with my inner side, also known was the real me, and known to others as my character.

Without a doubt, something has to lead to another; vires, and artes lead to mores, which is the most important torch of the three because mores begins with compassion, respect, and a deep sense of social responsibility. I have learned all people do not have mores because it is something you cannot be taught it is something you learn on your own as a young individual. Mores is what made me a better person for the society; I had to be willing to take responsibility for my actions.

Beholding the three torches makes me more than a qualified Seminole. These things make the leadership capabilities that are in me shine, brighter than any other individual I know. My driving passion to help others is not only concentrated in the computer engineering field. The experience I gained being a leader, and taking the next step forward has led to a kind of free form education that has helped solidify in my mind what I am capable of accomplishing and where my interest truly lie.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Oct 14, 2009   #2
"Vires" represents the moral, mental, and physical strength necessary for acting with confidence to advance our state, our nation, and our world. In order to embody Vires, one needs to be as strong as they are you have to have skills -- skills that are developed through...

I suggest adding a topic sentence to the front of each paragraph -- not the intro, but all the others. You should read each paragraph, decide what it's main idea is, and then capture that main idea in the opening sentence. For example:

Vires develops in response to adversity and opportunities in one's environment. As a seventeen-year-old female, almost...

Good luck!!
muffinman8380 1 / 5  
Oct 15, 2009   #3
I agree with EF_Kevin that you should add topic sentences to capture the main idea.

I also think you should integrate/incorporate yourself into the descriptions more. I think you should rewrite (a little bit) of the descriptions of Vires and other things so that you yourself are the center of the essay.

Good luck. And, I think its a solid start
EF_Stephen - / 264  
Oct 15, 2009   #4
EFKevin and muffinman both make really good points.

Here's the issue for me:

A skilled individual cannot be too skilled without character. Character begins with compassion, respect, and a deep sense of social responsibility. A young individual with these torches will be sure to have a successful life, from a higher education to powerful position in the career field.

I'm not sure what you mean here. Skill is certainly possible without character. These are the kinds of statements people make that sound really philosophical but really don't make much sense. Check for these kinds of things and really think about them.


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