Aspects Of My Life A University Wants - Essay '10

Every person possesses that one unique characteristic that he/she can brag about. Almost similar to that one building every architect in New York City wants to point to and say it's his. Well, in my case I've got not one, not two, but several traits that I can talk about. Pardon me for talking to so favorably of myself, but I pretty much am a Jack-of-all-trades & a master of none. From being a standby in an Elocution competition to the lead role in a Drama contest; From graphic designing to making draft resolutions, I've entered many a battlefield - most of being of different genres - and come close to achieving if not excelled. This is just the tip of the iceberg. If you looked through a magnifying glass, the person above would be evident to you. However on closer inspection through a microscope, I'm more than just a Jack.

I'm a very passionate debater. By debating I don't mean just formal points of information, I'd rather call it lawyering (minus the legitimate part). From a very young age, my focus changed many a time. Starting with a scientist, I soon wanted to be a painter & then a geneticist. However just like every boy I reached an age where I suddenly started to wear my spectacles and observe this world, the world as it really is. I discovered the true me that sat beneath all this fallacy and waited for the realization. It was in 11th grade; I wanted to be an orator, a speaker who was blessed with the caliber of moving audiences for the good of our kind. From then on, I promised myself to work towards this dream. However, I had a more deep-seated passion, the love for science and reason. I loved to question & I loved to debate, not only with people, but also with nature; primarily with nature. There rose the person within me; finally being acknowledged for what he wanted to be. With creativity and immeasurable passion for debate I would channel all of my zest into unraveling the obscurities of Mother Earth.

My drive, my zeal and passion led me express myself and I started to write. Penning down my neural inferences was a way for me to find out who I really was & what I wanted to be. Ultimately it led me to creating my blog at iSuranjan.tumblr.com; now my identity and a sounding board for all my abstract opinions.

Being told to write down all what I'm know and applauded for in 5000 characters is a difficult job. The task only gets more challenging when you look at yourself and question the most important aspect of yourself. As I begin to pen down the first thing anybody should know about me is my creative mind. These cystic fibers are more than just a host to extraordinary ideas. They're house to unique and meticulous craftsmanship. With passion for designing and photography I can least describe myself as purely a science geek. And then I ask myself the rhetorical question, what do I aim to achieve? Miraculously, I get a reply. I want to synergize all the physiognomies I posses and mold it into a good personality; my personality.

As the seed germinated, my educational focus gradually matured. From the days where I crammed up my books to feed my knowledge-hunger, I now want to bring out the best in me to realize my potential to the fullest. And what better way to do that then attend a university of such caliber. With aspirations of such magnitude, I look at Georgia Tech as my catalyst to transform me from the juvenile naďve I am to a person geared to face any challenge.

Plagued by the urge to set out and practice my fantasies I still found it incredibly important to keep up my grades high. And thus I pounced on every opportunity I got to showcase my unique without breaking the raft I stood on. I am not the best of scholars, I must agree. I may not be the best tester. However, there are things I posses that I find more costly than simple straight A's.

Any ideas of improving, ending, anything! Please tell me :)

Hello Suranjan!
Whenever you post an essay, include the prompt.


This seemed like a really obvious observation until I saw the word "brag." That single word made me like this sentence.

Well, in my case I've got not one, not two , but several traits that I can talk about ---- unnecessary emphasis


Hmm...I'm slightly unsure whether I like this part or not. I think it is clever of you to use that analogy, but ...
Anyway never mind :)


I'm not sure if I got your meaning properly. What do you mean by "points of information?"

Your fourth paragraph has too many unnecessary descriptions for my liking. Condense some of that stuff. It would be better if you join it with the preceding para.

Since I don't know the prompt, I cannot comment on the suitability of this essay. Your writing seems fine.