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AP Biology and AP Physics ; USC mini essay about interests


victoraguirre13 1 / 2  
Jan 8, 2013   #1
Describe your academic interests and how you plan to pursue them at USC. Please feel free to address your first- and second-choice major selections.

My academic interests have always revolved around the sciences. My interests have influenced me to take classes like AP Biology and AP Physics in order to have a better understanding of the subjects I hope to pursue in college. This interest has evolved into my pursuit to go into the medical field to become a dermatologist. I plan to pursue my interest in pre-medicine by majoring in Human Biology or Neuroscience at USC. The human body has always amazed me from a young age; the human body has learned to withstand mass amounts of damage and fight pathogens as it has evolved. However, the anatomy and the cognitive processes of the brain have also caught my attention; the brain, the most impressive part of the body, has evolved into structure that has helped us survive for thousands of years. Furthermore, I plan to continue volunteering at Kaiser Permanente and "shadow" a doctor in order to be better prepared for medical school.
exo101 1 / 8 2  
Jan 8, 2013   #2
so here's how I think it should look :

My academic interests have always revolved around the sciences, more specifically concerning the human body and the brain. The human body and its ability to withstand mass amounts of damage and fight pathogens as it has evolved has aroused my curiosities since a young age. The brain -- the most impressive part of the body -- has evolved into structure that has helped us survive for thousands of years (eloborate) . As a result, my love for the sciences and (here state another reason why - this reason has to be why you want to specifically be a dermatologist) has ignited my strong desire to pursue a career in the medical field as a dermatologist. I am positive that majoring in Human Biology or Neuroscience at USC will not only bring me one step closer to my dream career as a derm but it will also allow me to contribute to... idk just list how you can give back or why you wanna do it .

you have a good start. you just have to be more PASSIONATE and show them how much you want it. I hope this helped.
OP victoraguirre13 1 / 2  
Jan 8, 2013   #3
Thank you. I like the flow of your rewrite much better. I'll work on those problems.
exo101 1 / 8 2  
Jan 8, 2013   #4
You're very welcome :) good luck! Also could you give me one like and go to some of the posts I have helped with and give me another like too? I really need two more likes to delete my own post.
Teiji 2 / 4 2  
Jan 8, 2013   #5
hello exo101 and victoria girl can you do the same for my post and I will like your post as well.
Much love.

Sorry what are you trying to get across; you want to be a dermatologist or a neurosurgeon or just a doctor?

If you are trying to get into a program for Biology or Neuroscience write on either the human body or the brain. If it is for dermatology write on the skin.

It seems a lil misdirected. I am not sure what you are conveying please reply.


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