Additional Information for undergraduate admission

they dont ask for anything specific, just any additional information we want to tell the board of admissions

I did not do as well academically in high school as I could have. The first two years of my high school career were spent at a public school. The teachers at the school spent a lot of time disciplining other children. Since I was not one of the children that constantly needed discipline, I often did not get the same amount of attention from the teachers. I cruised my way through the first two years of high school, never really having to study or try too hard to get a passing grade. This was what I consider, the biggest mistake of my life. I transferred to a private school for my last two years of high school. I started off strong doing great in all my classes while balancing extracurricular activities. As the school year went on, I realized that I did not have the study skills that I needed to succeed. I had failed to learn the basic study skills that most students learn in their first few years of high school. This continues to haunt me to this day. I wish I had adapted the same skills that many of my peers had during their first years in high school. I have learned more about my study habits and what I need to do to succeed this year and continue to learn more about myself every day.

I had failed to learn the basic study skills that most students learn in their first few years of high school

The essay would be better if you had described what do you mean by the basic study skills. Personally, I feel that you are overemphasizing your weakness. Perhaps there are some strong points in your career;you may had got good grades in some subjects or had good ECAs. You probably some incidents that had poked your sense that you were not doing what you had been capable of. There are many options available.

Make a well crafted story of failure or never discuss failure at all. That is my point.

I hope that helps.

I did not do as well academically in high school as I could have. During the first two years, of my high school career were spent I was at a public school. The teachers at the school spent a lot of time disciplining other children. Since I was not one of the children that constantly needed discipline, I often did not get the same amount of attention from the teachers. Let's get rid of all this, because it souds like an excuse.

I cruised my way through the first two years of high school, never really having to study or try too hard to get a passing grade. This was what I consider, the biggest mistake of my life. I transferred to ...

okay, very good, but can you tell a little more about your plan to contribute to alleviating suffering and improving technology, etc.?

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