I released my white-knuckle handhold, threw my arms high above my head, and waited, praying silently, for my savior to catch my wrists.
^^'Praying' is not gramatically parallel with the other tenses in the sentence.
'The two-hour session would include a beginner-friendly position that would eventually be caught by a professional catcher'
^What is caught??
It sounded perfectly terrifying
^ahhhh is that a juxtaposition I see.
'rather, the gymnast moves and performs difficult tricks around the stationary bar roughly eight feet above the ground'
^It is after a semicolon, so you can omit 'rather'.
'The trapeze, however, required both the bar and the acrobat to move, and, to maximize the fear factor, was positioned three times higher than a set of gymnastics bars. '
^Did it require only at that time, or does it still require?
Simply the sight of the trapeze bar from the ground was enough to set my legs to trembling – how was I going to accomplish anything off the ground?'
^my legs to tremble?'
'I heard my cue – and hopped from the platform, swinging into motion.'
^and
swung'curiosity, my thirst to experience, overwhelmed me, and now I crave to experience everything that Carolina has to offer.'
^my thirst
for experience overwhelmed me ( You do not need a comma after 'experience'
and now I crave to experience everything that Carolina has to offer.
^You can remove 'and', and allow it to become a new sentence.
Furthermore, do you want to experience everything that Chapel Hill has to offer, or what the state of Carolina has to offer?
*This is a good piece. However, you can perhaps develop the reasons to attending Chapel Hill a bit more. You narrated everything quite well, and suddenly you link it to Chapel Hill and then end it in a matter of a sentence.
Faisal P, Essayforum.com Contributor