UT essay B: issue. Beijing Paralympic Games.

This is essay B agen, though completely different from my first attempt, please proofread.

Does it fit the question? Sound ok?

Choose an issue of importance to you—the issue could be personal, school related, local, political, or international in scope—and write an essay in which you explain the significance of that issue to yourself, your family, your community, or your generation.


If you watched the Opening Ceremony of the Beijing Paralympic Games, you would've seen a little girl in the middle of the 'Never-ending Dance'. Her name is Li Yue, she was 11, and under her pretty little pink ballet skirt, she had only one right leg. Li Yue was lucky because one leg was all that she lost to the Sichuan Earthquake that happened in may, 2008. She may had lost the possibility to become a ballerina, she still had a chance to live and explore the world, unlike the other nineteen thousand or so kids that were killed under the 7000 collapsed schools buildings.
I was at school in New Zealand at the time.When I heard the news it was already a day after the horrific earthquake, I did the best thing I could think of at the time: googled for all the informations I could find to help co-organize a fond raising event at school. 5000 dollars were send over in the name of my school and mum had put herself on the list of adopting the homeless kids in Sichuan. All around the world people were offering help, but still the lives that were took cannot come back. That 19,000 kids, any one of them could have become a scientist, an entrepreneur, the leader of a generation, but instead they were buried.
The school buildings turned out to be what we call 'tofu buildings', they were build in a hurry for the quantity but not quality, that's the main reason why so many school buildings were destroyed while the office buildings nearby weren't. The deaths of the next generation of China could have been avoided, but unfortunately the next generation did not seem to be the government's interest. China is rising to become one of the strongest countries in the world but not all aspects of China are ready. The government had alot to work on: the economy, the publicity, the Olympics......of course all this for giving my home country a better future, but they seem have missed the most important part: the future generation. The earthquake happened in a not very developed part of China: a not ready part. The school buildings were not ready to take on a 8.0 magnitude earth quakes, and certainly neither were the kids: they were learning in schools at the time, with dreams waiting for them to chase.
Has the society forgotten the importence of the next generation? In recent years, there have been deadly school collapses after earthquakes in Italy, Algeria, Morocco and Turkey. Most notably, in Pakistan in Oct. 2005, at least 17,000 children died as more than 7,000 schools collapsed after a powerful jolt shook a mountainous region near the Indian border. In the election that had just finished in New Zealand, the people chose the National leader who promised to improve the economy instead of the Labour leader who had been doing a great job on NZ's education.
Actually everyone wants a better futre in the end, but sometimes it's confusing how they want to achieve that: more money in their pockets now and not making sure their kids have a safe education environment with the risk that they may loose it all?
Putting Li Yue in the Opening Ceremony of the Beijing Paralympic Games shows China has learnt it the hard way: the government will do what it can for China's next generation to fufil their dreams. What about the rest of the world?


Kiko Zang

She may have lost the possibility of becoming a ballerina, but she still had a chance to live and explore the world, unlike the other nineteen thousand or so kids that were killed under the 7000 collapsed schools buildings.

When I heard the news it was already a day after the horrific earthquake, and I did the best thing I could think of at the time: googled all the information I could find to help co-organize a fund raising event at school. Five thousand dollars were sent in the name of my school and my mother had put herself on the list of adopting the homeless kids in Sichuan. All around the world people were offering help, but still the lives that were taken cannot be given back.


The school buildings turned out to be what we call 'tofu buildings', they were built in a hurry for the quantity but not quality, and that's the main reason why so many school buildings were destroyed, while the office buildings nearby weren't.

Has society forgotten the importance of the next generation? In recent years, there have been deadly school collapses after earthquakes in Italy, Algeria, Morocco and Turkey. Most notably, in Pakistan in Oct. 2005, at least 17,000 children died as more than 7,000 schools collapsed after a powerful jolt shook a mountainous region near the Indian border. In the election that had just taken place in New Zealand, the people chose the National leader who promised to improve the economy instead of the Labor leader who had been doing a great job on NZ's education.
Actually everyone wants a better future in the end, but sometimes it's confusing how they want to achieve that: more money in their pockets now and not making sure their kids have a safe educational environment with the risk that they may lose it all?
Putting Li Yue in the Opening Ceremony of the Beijing Paralympic Games shows China has learned it the hard way: the government will do what it can for China's next generation to fulfill their dreams. What about the rest of the world?

Hope this helps!!
Good luck :)

Kevin