Undergraduate Admissions Essay SCAD Savannah BFA Arch

Can anyone help! Im writing my statement of pupose for SCAD. Maximum 500 words! I have a good start but i need help!!

The statment of purpose shoud be no more the 500 words and should give an overview of the applicant's academic and personal experience, describing peperation for and commitment to further study at SCAD, as well as eductional and professional goals and aspirations.

I never could phathom why, at the tender age of seven, I was fascinated - mesmerized even - by the built atmosphere. I would wander the streets of my neighbourhood, transfixed by the rainbow hues, marvel at the varied roof pitches, the plethera of windows, the cluster of greenery that scattered the front yard: all the while imagining what transpired beyond the welcoming front door. I wuould conjur stories of the families that lived there, ponder on there dailing activities and queation whether or not their beautiful houses functioned to their needs: and if not how could I change that? Little did I know that, at the tender age of seven, I was a budding architect.

I read somewhere that architecture only occurs when function marries beauty; for a beautiful piece that is poorly designed and ergonomically impaired is but simply visual art. Architecure considers certains aspects: uses and practicality, efficiency, affordability and durability; all without sacrificing visual appeal. An architect's purpose is to find the balance in these aspects ant harevest it into design.

I want to pursue a Bachelor of Fine Arts Degree in Architecture, specifically at Savannah College of Art and Design, because I believe it is the perfect institution to teach me how to maintain the balance required for becoming a reknowed architect. Savannah not only provides its students with a strong design foundation, but also posseses an environment tailored for the creative mind.

Dimoaya,

Nice work. I would however caution that you reread the prompt:

"The statment of purpose shoud be no more the 500 words and should give an overview of the applicant's academic and personal experience, describing preperation for and commitment to further study at SCAD, as well as eductional and professional goals and aspirations."

This prompt is pretty explicit about asking you to show concrete background and direction: arch. classes you may have taken or related subject matter, experiences outside the classroom, your specific goals within the architectural field, etc. The want applicants that are focused and show a true commitment to the rigor of the architectural path.

I think you need to work on developing answers to these questions to ensure that you fully address the prompt. I love the personal quality of the essay, and your flair for description, but unfortunately this essay presents some additional constraints

On a minor note, be careful with spelling--their vs there (spellcheck won't catch that!) and plethora, not plethera.

Best of luck!

Cheers,
Janson
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Thanks alot Jansen

I did read the prompt, what I am stuck on is how to reintroduce my experiences or how to further answer the question.

I have the answers to the questions but I have I don't know how to flow from where I am to where I want to go. I think I have to add a couple paragrahs before the second paragrah, outlining my experiences and skills.

However when I am finished with the essay I will resubmit it and will really appreciate further critique

Thanks alot for the spell corrections

Sounds good. Think about this is a potential structure:

Intro (keep your current intro--perhaps eliminate the last sentence for the sake of concision and because it is rather obvious/formulaic). Keep it crisp.

Body-academic/personal experience/goals (probably best to keep this 1 paragraph since the word limitation is just 500 words). This is the 'core' of your essay and should be the longest paragraph.

Conclusion (streamline your current 2nd and 3rd paragraph to create your conclusion--keep the idea about function marrying beauty and how Savannah will help you find the balance). Keep it crisp.

Hope this helps.

Cheers,
Janson
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