How are you inspirational? How do you inspire people? I didn't see any examples or explanation of this in your essay.
For the first paragraph, give some specific examples of your diligence. Anyone can claim they are diligent, but its the proof that counts. Same goes for the second paragraph, and the third paragraph. You make a lot of statements but don't back them up.
Also, I don't see how the last paragraph relates to the prompt, which I assume is "pick three words to desribe yourself." You could do away with it and have more room to elaborate on the above.
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