Think.Transform.Thrive. From University of Chicago-my desired place to study.

How does the University of Chicago, as you know it now, satisfy your desire for a particular kind of learning, community, and future? Please address with some specificity your own wishes and how they relate to Chicago.

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s a person who approaches things (stronger, concrete word) in illogical ways, I was drawn to this sentence.



This is rather confusing. What are you trying to say here? It sounds like a good idea forming escept your didn't structute it fully.


Don't state what the school has in this manner. The admission officers know what the school offers. Try writing something like "With the University's focus on Socratic teaching, I will...."

I think that the core and Socratic method of teaching is mentioned in every essay on why Uchicago is the perfect fit. Find something specific and unique that you like about the school.

Do you mind reading my Why UChicago? It's titled: Why UChicago: Hogwarts in the Muggle world

How does the University of Chicago, as you know it now, satisfy your desire for a particular kind of learning, community, and future? Please address with some specificity your own wishes and how they relate to Chicago.

Think. Transform. Thrive. "The University of Chicago was founded to challenge accepted ideas" said Theodore A. O'Neill, Dean of Admissions. As a person who approaches things-problems, tasks, and ideas- in illogical ways, I was drawn to this sentence. I was tempted to challenge the accepted ideas; though, more tempted to challenge the ideas of University of Chicago or perhaps challenged by its ideas. This is it, the ideal place for my ideas to come to life.
With the University's focus on Socratic teaching, I will be more engaged in think with others and share my thoughts, rather than wonder off in my little world. This along with its core curriculum would provide me with broad academic experiences I never had before. With the rigorous academic works of the university, not only will I be engaged in the life of the mind, but I will be much better prepared for the future no matter where I end up be. I like its study abroad program, on campus hospital, though I was not satisfied by those. University of Chicago, as I know it now, satisfy my desire of a learning environment engaged in ideas; ideas will change the world. I'm sure the Chicago education will be a life-changing experience. Also with its perfect campus location, I can easily visit Chinatown and once again experience my Chinese culture.

how is it now? and ummm
do I have to "cite"(not sure if that's the right word) these since I got them off the stuff the Univeristy sent me; they really got my attention.

Think. Transform. Thrive. "The University of Chicago was founded to challenge accepted ideas" said Theodore A. O'Neill, Dean of Admissions. As a person who approaches things-problems, tasks, and ideas- in illogical ways, I was drawn to this sentence.

{I think you could probably omit the first sentence. The University of Chicago probably expects you to be drawn to that, namely because it's coming from their admissions dean and printed on their brochure. Marketing really works, believe me....we live in a society that relies on it as if it were dogma. You could start the essay from the second sentence."I relish the opportunity to approach problems, tasks, and ideas in (abnormal,creative,unconventional.....since illogical ways just tells me that you're most likely to end up with the wrong answer).


I was tempted to challenge the accepted ideas; though, more tempted to challenge the ideas of University of Chicago or perhaps challenged by its ideas.
{Accepted ideas (or conventional wisdom) has always been my arch enemy.......}


This is it, the ideal place for my ideas to come to life.(This is the ideal place for me). With the University's focus on Socratic teaching, I will be more engaged in (to) think with others and share my thoughts (thinking with others and sharing your thoughts seems a bit repetitive, are they not the same thing?), rather than wonder (wander) off in my little world.(note: wandering off in ones own little world can actually be a good thing and may lead to success. One person comes to mind....hint: E=MC squared).....


This along with its core curriculum would provide me with (a) broad academic experiences I never had before. With the rigorous academic works of the university, not only will I be engaged in the life of the mind, but (I will be much:omit,) also better prepared for the future.


Overall, I think you understand what the University of Chicago is about. Be sure to show the reader you are a good fit for Chicago rather than just telling. Perhaps you might want to tell a story of when your propensity for "illogical" thinking came to be a source of inspiration or reward for you, and how the university could help you in harnessing this potential for future application. Hope this helps and best of luck!

Thank you very much,
and I do not get the hint(j/king). :)

Do you mind read my philosophy essay? Only got two comments.
http://www.essayforum.com/undergraduate-admission-essays-2/w hy-not-perhaps-key-question-between-9498/