Stony Brook: HONORS - SPECIAL PROGRAM ESSAYS

Hi, I'm Artur. I need help with my writing. English is not my native tongue and I'm trying my best on the college application. Any help is going to be useful.

Is it too small? What should be added in that case? What about the language use, is it too simplistic?

Paint a verbal portrait of an ideal physician and tell us about the experiences that you have had which have helped to shape this ideal.
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Some people are going to doctors a lot. Others almost do not go to them because they feel healthy. In any case everybody has a perception of an ideal physician. They are always waiting that the new doctor is going fulfill their vision of him.

My ideal physician differs from the perception of others. I'm not concerned with looks and attitude toward the patient of physician. My greatest concern is the persistence of him to cure the patient. I do not want a doctor that is going to give up on the half way. I want the doctor that is focusing on the patient and sometimes abandons his personal needs in order to do all he possibly can.

I'm one of those people that are going to a doctor really rarely. I cherish the professionalism in any case, especially in medicine. I dislike when people are trying to sell themselves for what they truly are not. I want a doctor that can show his true self to the patient. So far many physicians that I went to fulfilled my perception of the ideal one. They helped me to create, and modify this perception.

In closing, different people have different views on the ideal physician. Some want him to be really kind while other care about the professionalism more. Despite all of the differences one of is finding what he or she is looking for and sticks with that one doctor.

While many people go to doctors a great deal,others almost never go to them because they feel healthy. In any case, everybody has a perception of an ideal physician. They are always waiting to see if the new doctor is going fulfill their vision of him or her.

I'm one someone who is going to a doctor really rarely.


I thought that this was an interesting essay; however, it did not answer the question that was asked. I felt that it was expressing your opinion on what makes a great physician or what you look for in one. You did not talk about an experience you have had. As far as the length, you need to check the requirements for the essay. GOOD LUCK!

I'm really pleased that you liked it. The reason why i do not really have an experience part because I'm always never going to the doctor. And even if I'm in the medical office I'm there for less then five minutes. And that time is not enough to evaluate the doctor (((. The only big injury I had was around ten years ago and I do not remember the doctor. That why I put my perception and not the experience.