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STANFORD supplement... help criticize please


dudeitsmayy 1-2 Edited by: dudeitsmayy  Oct 25, 09, 11:02pm  #
So i have included my answers to the short answers for Stanford supplement.. as well as the essay prompts and my answers :/
feel free to criticizee.


Name your favorite books, authors, films, and/or musical artists.
I tend not to play favorites because I feel that having favorites would limit what I can be exposed to. As of now, I had enjoyed reading The Tao of Pooh, Harry Potter series, A Thousand Splendid Suns, Marley and Me, Twilight series, and Daughter of Fortune, among others. My musical taste range from classical to hip-hop to anything that sounds good at the moment.

What newspapers, magazines, and/or websites do you enjoy?
I enjoy reading magazines like Architectural Digest and Seventeen, as well as newspapers like Pawprints (school newspaper), LA Times, and NY Times. The internet provides me easy access to knowledge via Google, unknown words via dictionary.com, and social networking via Facebook.

What is the most significant challenge that society faces today?
Acceptance of ideas without argument is the most significant challenge that society faces today. With a new generation, new ideas burst into the scene, some that work and some that don't. People nowadays are too passive and tend to accept rather than challenge what is given to them. In a sense, we are "taking" more than "giving" back what we think.

How did you spend your last two summers?
For 2008 summer, I flew to China and witnessed the Olympics and its atmosphere in Beijing firsthand. It opened my eyes to the interaction of various countries and their cultures in one city. For 2009 summer, I traveled to Japan and China, to revisit my birth place for the last time (the hospital is being rebuilt) and to reconnect with my dominant culture.

What were your favorite events (e.g., performances, exhibits, sporting events, etc.) this past year?
I have been a piano player and a near straight A student for twelve years. In the midst of a difficult and time-consuming junior year, I pulled together a huge and complex piano program and performed it spectacularly for my Certificate of Merit test as well as maintained A's in all seven academic classes. I am proud of myself for managing both without slipping.

What historical moment or event do you wish you could have witnessed?
I wish I could have witnessed the decision making of dropping the bomb on Hiroshima and Nagasaki to end World War II because then I could look for the moment of opportunity where United States and Japan could have experienced a paradigm shift and avoided the bombing and tragedy altogether.

What five words best describe you?
Happy, independent, versatile, spontaneous, adaptable

Stanford students are widely known to possess a sense of intellectual vitality. Tell us about an idea or an experience you have had that you find intellectually engaging.
In this past summer, I spent two weeks in China, visiting family, having fun, and volunteering my bilingual skills to the Guangzhou Asian Games Organizing Committee. I was given a chance to be part of something big – the Guangzhou Asian Games were going to take place in Guangzhou, China in November of 2010. For two weeks, I placed my translation skills to the test. I was partnered with an older and more experienced translator who taught me the ropes as we headed off to welcome foreigners to Guangzhou. We were assigned to introduce various representatives from participating countries to the Guangzhou Stadium and provide translation on the spot for questions and answers. I faced countless questions that required the switch from Chinese to English and vice versa almost instantaneously.
Although it seemed like a lot of brain work, this experience was fun and gave me an opportunity to interact with people from a variety of cultures. I was constantly engaged in conversation, regardless of in Chinese or English, and it widened my perspective of being bilingual. Rather than see Chinese and English as two separate languages that turn on and off when comprehending a situation, I am now able to understand a situation in both languages and explain more or less accurately in either languages what had happened.

Virtually all of Stanford's undergraduates live on campus. What would you want your future roommate to know about you? Tell us something about you that will help your future roommate -- and us -- know you better.
Dear roomie,
I think the first thing you should know about me is that I don't bite. I don't even look scary at all. In fact, I am your typical teenage girl, living life to the fullest. I take risks when the situation calls for it and I am not afraid of laughing at myself (though I try not to make a fool of myself sometimes). I like to talk and debate but I do respect other people's opinions. I may appear fickle and always changing my mind, but this is only the product of my mind jumping from different perspectives. I gauge a situation based on facts and tend to see more than one side to a problem. Because of this, I am a great listener and can probably provide multiple solutions to anything you present me with.
I played piano for more than twelve years and to be cliché, music is my outlet. Though I tend to hold back a little in music, I like the idea of how simple it is to express emotions by pressing the black and white keys. I like swimming more than running, eating more than sleeping, and playing while working. I multitask but give the utmost attention to each and every thing I set my mind to. I try and stay optimistic all the time and like to have everyone around me happy. I like to live in the moment and do things spontaneously.
I was born in Japan, raised in China for four years, and grew up in California – I'm open to having multiracial friends and enjoy various cultures. I hope in time, we will be not just roomies, but close friends!

Yours truly,


i'm still working on the last one :/
 
EF_Sean [Moderator] 6-3815  Oct 26, 09, 07:24am  #
dudeitsmayy:
For 2009 summer, I traveled to Japan and China, to revisit my birth place for the last time (the hospital is being rebuilt) and to reconnect with my dominant culture.


Which one was your birth place? And is whichever one it is really your "dominant" culture?

Apart from that, these essays are all very well-written. Most of them are too short for you to add anything, so I'd say you're in good shape.

Sean, EssayForum.com
 
vothiha 7-34  Oct 26, 09, 09:44am  #
[quote=dudeitsmayy]So i have included my answers to the short answers for Stanford supplement.. as well as the essay prompts and my answers :/
feel free to criticizee.

burst into the scene: I look up in the oxford dictionary and find this phrase "burst onto the scene"


Can I explain this phrase for me ? Thanks!" could have experienced a paradigm shift"

taught me the ropes or learn/ know the ropes: learn how a particular job should be done

provide translation on the spot/imediately for questions and answers.

required the switch/ a quick change from Chinese to English

Dear roomie: it should be " roomate", isn't it?


living life to the fullest: i like this expression
.
I gauge/ARGUE a situation based on facts and

to be cliché, music is my outlet.

Though I tend to hold back a /HESITATE A little in music,

I like swimming more than running, eating more than sleeping, and playing while working: your expression show how strong your vitality is. I love it

. I multitask / be versatile : logical connection

but give the utmost/ MOST attention to each and every thing

like to have everyone around me happy: "make everyone around me happy " maybe a better expression to show how giving you are

I like to live in the moment and do things spontaneously: You like me this point

Vo Thi Ha
 
dudeitsmayy 1-2  Oct 26, 09, 05:41pm  #
EF_Sean:
Which one was your birth place? And is whichever one it is really your "dominant" culture?


I was born in Japan and Chinese is my dominant culture. I should probably separate the two to decrease confusion huh?

Something like:

For 2009 summer, I revisited my birth place in Japan for the last time (the hospital is going to be rebuilt) and traveled to China to reconnected with my dominant Chinese culture.

Would that be better?

vothiha:
Can I explain this phrase for me ? Thanks!" could have experienced a paradigm shift"


Paradigm shifts were someting that I learned in my Theory of Knowledge class and it is basically acknowledging and changing the way one person thinks to become more open-minded and understanding towards others.


Thank you guys so much, I'll revise ASAP!
 
eclipze 2-6  Oct 27, 09, 05:52am  #
めずらしい。 で、君は日本人ですか中国人ですか? (that's rare. So, are you Japanese or Chinese?)

Anthony Thio
 
vothiha 7-34  Oct 27, 09, 06:04am  #
Could you show me how to quote as the way you did? I mean you quoted my sentence in a shaden box and give a explanation bellow. Thanks!

Vo Thi Ha
 
EF_Sean [Moderator] 6-3815  Oct 27, 09, 11:44am  #
Select the text you want to quote. Then, click on the link marked "Quote" at the bottom of the box. If you don't see the link, try making sure Javascript is enable in your browser.

Sean, EssayForum.com
 
xoxovicki 0-6  Oct 27, 09, 11:16pm  #
"As of now, I had enjoyed"

Tense.

vicki
 

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