"Rome did not finish building in one day." - admission essay help

this is the topic:Choose an issue of importance to you—the issue could be personal, school related, local, political, or international in scope—and write an essay in which you explain the significance of that issue to yourself, your family, your community, or your generation.

my essay

"Rome did not finish building in one day." Success will not come to you if you just sit there and doing nothing. The amount you pay is equivalent to the amount you receive. This is the rule in the world. No matter where you are, who you are, or when you are, this is the only true rule in universe. If you have put enough effort in something, then you should receive the same amount of gift. But if you didn't, you will not get anything you want. It's like work, if you work certain hours and you will get pay the hours you work. So the hours you don't work , then you will not get pay.
I love to play badminton that it feels like part of my life. On the court, we always defeat everyone who comes up to challenge us. Unfortunately one day a huge guy from Taiwan comes with his friend to Recreation Center. He started to practice with his friends. I can felt the pressure from him. He comes up to us for a match. We accepted it with fears. We throw the ball up in the air and it points to them. In badminton this is how to determine who will serve first. My father taps on my shoulder and told me to get on my nervousness. although I nodded but not in my heart. He serves it to me and I hit it really back and high. I run back to the court and stay there and wait. But the guy jumps real high and smashes it towards me. I wasn't prepared for it and lost a point. My father shouts out:"Li, this is a real game, not a game for kids. If we didn't take it seriously enough, we will be the losers!" After this, I am more scared than ever which cause me to lose more points. The ball hits the ground in front of me and my dad blames on me more and more. By the end of the game, the score is 15 to 4. I felt depress by defeated by them. After this game, I still played few more games. And I lost all of them.
I got called up by my father after all those games that we lost. He seems seriously than ever. He holds the racket and said: "Did you felt scare? If you don't then you should not play badminton anymore. Although you have fear but you should face it and defeat it. Everyone will have their own wall to breaks through. What if Einstein just gave up on his first try on light bulb? He will never invent the light bulb. He did practice and practice which allow him to builds enough confidence to break through. So are you. You should practice more and more to build up your confidence. And let's beat them on next time!" I nodded with tears coming out of my eye.
After that day, I practice badminton day after day. I will think of what my father told me about when I encounter a move that's can't be done: "practice and practice is the only way to success." I will keep trying the move and burn it down into my brain. Few weeks later, I saw the Taiwan guy. He still looks strong but I have confidence to win. I asked him for a rematch proudly. My father smiles at me and I do believe in it. Even though this is the second time he serves to me. But I take it easily and hit to a wide open spot. I score a point that's the most important point in my life. My father didn't blame me this time. He said nothing and just rise up his hand with a thumb up. After ten minutes of silence, I yell out: "Yes! We make it!" The ball just lands on the line and it was on their side. We won the game, I hi five with my father. He said: "nice confidence, let's get it going." I just feel so good because my harsh father said something good to me on the court.
I am still playing badminton with my father now. He told me confidence is the most important thing when you playing a game. Because it requires fast reaction and motion. If you were not confidence enough, then you will act slow. And this will apply to anything in my life. Everything needs confidence to achieve it. And practice is the only way to get confidence. There is no sneaky way through success. The same amount of effort will give you the same amount of success.

thx very much!

CAN ANYONE HELP ME?

no one???

"Rome wasn't built in a day."

Success will not come to you if you just sit there and do nothing.

This is the rule in the world. No matter where you are, who you are, or when you are, this is the only true rule in the universe.

If you have put enough effort into something, then you should receive the same amount back.

But if you didn't put any effort in, you will not get anything in return.

It's like work, if you work certain hours and you will get payed for the hours you work.

For the hours you don't work , you will not get payed.

I love to play badminton so much, that it feels like part of my life.

Unfortunately, one day a huge guy from Taiwan came with his friend to the Recreation Center.

I could feel the pressure from him.

He came up to us for a match.

We accepted it with fear.

We threw the ball up in the air and it pointed to them.

In badminton, this is how to determine who will serve first.

My father tapped on my shoulder and told me to get over my nervousness.

Although I nodded, my heart was not in it.

He served it to me and I hit it really back and high.

After this, I was more scared than ever, which caused me to lose more points.

The ball hit the ground in front of me and my dad blamed me more and more.

By the end of the game, the score was 15 to 4.

I felt depressed from being defeated by them.


My father called me after all those games that we had lost.

He seemed more serious than ever.

He held the racket and said: "Did you feel scared?

Everyone will have their own walls to break through.

What if Eddison just gave up on his first try on the light bulb?

He would never have invented the light bulb.

He practiced and practiced, which allowed him to build enough confidence to break through.

So should you.

You should practice more and more to build up your confidence. And let's beat them next time!" I nodded with tears coming out of my eyes.

A few weeks later, I saw the Taiwan guy.

He said nothing and just gave me the thumbs up.

After ten minutes of silence, I yell out: "Yes! We made it!"

The ball just lands on the line and it was on their side. We won the game, I high five my father.

He said: "nice confidence, let's keep it going."

He told me confidence is the most important thing when you are playing a game. Because it requires fast reaction and motion. If you were not confident enough, then you will act slow.

Good luck in school!!

:)

dont use that many "you"s

Where are you applying to?

Just curious haha