most appealing about Columbia (afraid it Doesnt make sense...)

Please tell us what you find most appealing about Columbia and why:

Face it. The job market is increasingly competitive due to the economic crisis. Companies hire only the best and they know that Columbia graduates are the best. Why? Because to be a Columbia graduate' means much more than just the name. It means passing the College's rigorous courses, many of which are unrivaled anywhere. It means having a mind open to diversity and fantastic social skills. It means having the determination to compete and the ability to successfully overcome any challenges presented. That is what Columbia means and why a Columbia graduate is the best: I want to among the best.

Here is my problem...I wanted to answer the question without directly saying: "Columbia appeals to me because......" so I tried to answer it using a different approach. but i think, my approach seems more off topic than actually answering it.

what I'm trying to say is that Columbia appeals to me because of : "College's rigorous courses, many of which are unrivaled anywhere," and that it puts you in a position where you face challenges that take determination to overcome, and prepares you well for the future.

If it doesn't make sense, please tell me (because it doesn't work if only I understand what I'm trying to say). I think I may rewrite it.

Face it, the job market is increasingly competitive due to the economic crisis. Companies hire only the best and they know Columbia graduates are the best. Why? Because to be a Columbia graduate means more than just the name. It means passing the College's rigorous courses, many of which are unrivaled anywhere. It means having a open mind to diversity and fantastic social skills. It means having the determination to compete and the ability to successfully overcome any challenges presented. That is what Columbia means and why a Columbia graduate is the best; I want to among the best.

Okay so this good but it really doesn't answer the prompt fully because you keep on saying "it means....." Maybe it's just me. Also, if you can put another school's name, say Harvard, and it still makes sense then your essay isn't being specific and doing its job.

Hope this helps and best of luck!

okay, that's what I thought.
Thank you!
I already rewrote one over because I realized it's to vague.

Still, thank you for your feed back =)

You are most welcome! Best of luck with everything!

@debaterchick09
a open mind?
lol

My bad ment to put an :)
Hopefully Yfung91 understood what i meant!

My generation needs to face the fact that the job market is increasingly competitive due to the economic crisis. Companies hire only the best, and they know that Columbia graduates are the best.

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For these reasons, I would be privileged to be accepted as a Columbia student; I want to among the best.

Hmmmm.. if you make further revisions, post them here so we can help! These essays are tough! You are doing well.