Grinnell College Supplement

This is in response to a question asking how I first heard about Grinnell. Please give me constructive feedback!

The first person to mention Grinnell to me was my mother. She said to me something along the lines of: 'if you're interested in a liberal arts education, there is a great school in Iowa called Grinnell. I encouraged your brothers to apply there, but neither of them were interested in going to school in the middle of a cornfield'. That didn't deter me, though. Most of the other schools on my list were in semi-rural parts of the mid-west anyway, so I thought I might as well look into Grinnell, too.
Once I began researching Grinnell, I found myself immediately drawn to the school; the academics, the international focus and student diversity all sounded great - on paper. But it wasn't until after staying on campus overnight that Grinnell really began to stand out among all the schools I had been looking at. The campus was beautiful and easy to navigate, and the students I encountered were all incredibly friendly and welcoming, the classes I sat in on were stimulating, and the moderate class sizes enabled everyone to be engaged.
It seems that the more I learn about Grinnell, the more attached to it I become. I understand why people come from far and wide to attend this unique institution; it is clear that everyone who is at Grinnell truly wants to be. Even the small surrounding town, which had been such a disincentive to my brothers, seemed like advantageous in contributing to a real sense of community on campus. The combination of Grinnell's outstanding academics and faculty, its progressive perspective, its friendly, hard-working student body, and its semi-secluded location all combine to make Grinnell an ideal learning environment and somewhere that I would love to be!

It looks good to me, you've stated how you learned about the school and stated your love and interest in the school as well. I can't think of anything constructive to say but IMO I think you're on the right track

Thanks! I appreciate it :)

I hesitate to change anything, because this really expresses your personality so well...

If you were going to change something, though, maybe you could make that first paragraph more interesting... I don't like, "along the lines of"... I don't think it is a good way to express it.

This seems very general, very vague...but you can empower it by telling specifically what you plan to do as a professional. Even if you are not sure, come up with a tentative plan and explain it. That is what I think you should do. Convey a sense of purpose.