In five or six sentences, tell us how you first became interested in BU

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In five or six sentences, tell us how you first became interested in BU and what steps you have taken to learn more about us.

It is not difficult living in Boston and not hears about Boston University. I was being there so many time middle schools thru high school. My experience as a visitor and as a student in Boston University has been one of the main factors that motivated me to want to attend Boston University after high school. One of those experiences was the A+ Prep College Academic this summer. Where I had the great opportunity to asked question about the experience of admission and learn more about Boston University, through my tutors who are current students of the University. Another of the way I used to know more about Boston University has been in my AVID class and through conversations between my friends and me. And of course the internet and through different website that offer diverse information.

The grammar here needs a lot of work:



This sentence uses a double negative which, ironically, negates your actual meaning. Revise.



You need to revise your tenses here.





Try this instead: "Another way I learned more about Boston University was through my AVID class and through conversations between my friends and me."

This is a sentence fragment.



Also a sentence fragment.

You should fix your spelling and grammatical errors.
Your reasons for why you became interested in the university and not very original. I think you should provide reasons that show more of your personality and explain why you belong in this university.

Exactly. Why BU and not BC, for example? Where is your passion?

Yeah, I agree with Stephen. Make it sound more BU-oriented and show why it HAS to be BU and not any other school.

It is not difficult to live in Boston and hear about Boston University (BU). I have been there so many times throughout middle school and high school. My experiences as a visitor to BU and as a student in A+ Prep College Academy have been the main factors that motivate me to want to attend BU after high school. In A+ Prep College Academy I had the great opportunity to ask questions about the experience of the admissions process and learn more about BU and student life through my tutors, who are current students of the University. I felt very comfortable and welcome while at the Academy and on field trips with my AVID class from The English High School. These experiences drew me to look more deeply at BU. I see that BU has the majors I am interested in as well as opportunities for internships, scholarships, and work experience that will lead me to a successful future.
In addition, I looked through the Boston University website and through different website that offer diverse information.

And what did you learn, exactly, that convinced you that you just had to go to BU.

I agree with the others...your points aren't bad, but they don't really explain why you want to go to BU specifically.

revised...
It is not difficult to hear about Boston University when you live in Boston. Throughout middle school and high school I had visited Boston University many times. I was also given a chance to see what the campus culture and student life was like at BU when I was attending the A+ Prep College Academic this past summer. Also, my tutors are current students at BU, and through them I heard about their own personal experiences.

Some of the sentences just need restructuring; some of the sentences don't really need to be there either. I left my suggestion.

"during the field trips with my AVID class"

I don't know that there is much point in revising further anymore. You aren't given a lot of room to begin with, and what you have know answers the question well enough.

I agree, everything you have (after the many, many revisions) is perfect!

Well~your answer is much more compelling than mine since I live far away from US~Good luck~