Common app short answer (Academic League)

The atmosphere is tense. Both teams sit in their seats anxiously awaiting the next tossup question. "What is the award given out for the year's best science fict" Buzz! The moderator gets cut off halfway. "The Hugo Award," a member of the opposing team says. "That is incorrect," the moderator responds. I think quickly; a light bulb flashes in my head. "The Nebula Award," I stammer, eliciting a nod of approval from the moderator.

Such is a typical scene from Academic League, a form of "quiz bowl" in which students respond to questions from a range of different subject areas. I joined my school's Academic League team in the ninth grade, unaware of what to expect. Quickly I became hooked. The dogged competition, the team camaraderie and the euphoria after answering a question correct, each has drawn me closer to the game. The greatest reward of Academic League has definitely been the test of knowledge gained. Every time I know or understand the correct response, I am reminded of my commitment to academics, not just for the class or the grade but also for its overall value.

Any insight or response is greatly appreciated! M.W.

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I think this is really good! one thing though, it has to be less than 150 words and i think you have more than that. they won't let you upload it if it is too long so you might want to shorten it. other than that, it explains your e.c. well while being descriptive.

Thanks, I shortened it some so it saved correctly on the common app. Any more suggestions?

The atmosphere is tense. Both teams sit in their seats anxiously awaiting the next tossup question. "What is the award given out for the year's best science fict--" Buzz! The moderator gets cut off halfway. "The Hugo Award," a member of the opposing team says. "That is incorrect," the moderator responds. I think quickly; a light bulb flashes in my head. "The Nebula Award," I stammer, eliciting a nod of approval from the moderator.

Such is a typical scene from Academic League, a form of "quiz bowl" in which students respond to questions from a range of different subject areas. I joined my school's Academic League team in the ninth grade, unaware of what to expect. Quickly I became hooked. The dogged competition, the team camaraderie and the euphoria after answering a question correct, each has drawn me closer to the game. The greatest reward of Academic League has definitely been the test of knowledge gained. Every time I know or understand the correct response, I am reminded of my commitment to academics, not just for the class or the grade but also for its overall value.


Wow, brilliant! I added a dash when the moderator got cut off, but other than that this needs no changes. Great job switching tenses half way through. No errors, and the weird action at the start is entertaining for the reader.