BU supplement essays (engineering and BU)

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why engineering?
The work of engineers is what making modern life as we know it possible. Almost everything we use in our daily lives is someway connected to an engineer. Today, engineers work towards developing the things that almost everyone on the planet will use in some way in the future. The challenge of developing these things is what inspires me to become an engineer.

Engineers turn ideas into reality. From a young age, I have always been captivated by how things are put together and how things work. I would spend countless hours playing with LEGOs, trying to improve on my previous designs. Each time, I would try to create something better than the one from the day before.

As I got older, my strength in mathematics and science began to show. Because I was good in the subjects, I became more and more interested in my Math and Science classes. When I began the process of looking into colleges, it became obvious that engineering would be a perfect fit for me.

As a high school student who has not had a chance to take any engineering courses, I do not know field of engineering I wish to study. However, I do know that I want to attend a university that has a renowned engineering department. As I researched many colleges and universities around the country, I realized that Boston University fulfills this description.

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and why BU
The search for the perfect college can be overwhelming. As I started my search, I was overloaded with information about many colleges located around the country. After months of research and campus visits, I began to sculpt a reasonable size list of possible matches for myself. It became apparent that Boston University would be a perfect fit for me. BU's perfect location and reputation for academic excellence are what place it at the top of my college list.

As I started to research different colleges, location became an important factor in my decision on what schools to apply to. BU's location in Boston separated it from most of the colleges in the country. For me, Boston would be the perfect city to go to college in. It is far away enough from my hometown for me to become independent from my family, yet close enough for me to go home when I want to. I know that I love the area after attending high school near Boston and spending time at friends' houses in the nearby communities.

The most important factor in determining my list of colleges was the school's reputation for academic excellence. BU has had a long, rich tradition of academic excellence. It was the School of Engineering that really attracted my attention and drew me towards BU. Because I do not know what field of engineering I want to study, the variety of fields offered at BU were a major attraction. I feel that BU is the school that will allow me to become the person and professional I aspire to be.


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The work of engineers is what making modern life as we know it possible. Almost everything we use in our daily lives is someway connected to an engineer. Today, engineers work towards developing the things that almost everyone on the planet will use in some way in the future. The challenge of developing these things is what inspires me to become an engineer.

For this paragraph above, can you list a few specific things (i.e. things crated by engineers that help people in the modern world) so that it is not too general?

This next paragraph is GREAT!
Engineers turn ideas into reality. From a young age, I have always been captivated by how things are put together and how things work. I would spend countless hours playing with LEGOs, trying to improve on my previous designs. Each time, I would try to create something better than the one from the day before.



As I got older, my strength in mathematics and science began to show. Because I was good in these subjects, I became more and more interested in my math and science classes. When I began the process of looking into colleges, it became obvious that engineering would be a perfect fit for me.

As a high school student who has not had a chance to take any engineering courses, I do not know which field of engineering I wish to study. However...

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and why BU
The search for the perfect college can be overwhelming. As I started my search, I was overloaded with information about many colleges located around the country. After months of research and campus visits, I began to sculpt a significantly long list of possible matches for myself. It became apparent that Boston University would be a perfect fit for me. BU's perfect location and reputation for academic excellence are what place it at the top of my college list.

For the rest of this part about "why BU," I think you should mention academic excellence only once and make room to name specific resources and qualities that BU offers -- things that make it your top choice among schools.

thanks so much for the help. much appreciated.