As soon as I stepped into the admissions office at Brown University, my Mom handed me the most recent issue of the
student-published Brown Jug. Before my information session had even begun I had perused and
often laughed out loud at
most of its contents.
And by the time the tour
came aroundbegan, I had already finished it and had set my mind on being a part of it. Since I was a kid I have been reading political satire, such as The Onion, and I have always dreamed of
one day creating political and social satire for people to enjoy.
There you go for starters. You can go through the rest of your essay and eliminate all the unecessary words. A lot of the time you can get your idea across in a much more succint manner.
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