Why Bates supplement any suggestion and comment is welcomed

I am thirsty for knowledge. As one of the best liberal arts college in the US, Bates is a haven for seekers of knowledge, freedom and justice. Bates has distinguished faculties focusing on teaching and research. Student population of Bates—intellectual, passionate, and friendly—forms an academically challenging environment which helps me meet my academic goal. Besides, the school's small size and a student-faculty ration of 10:1 mean that student/faculty interaction is plentiful, and close friendships are easily formed.

I am trying to form a global perspective. Bates has a diverse student body, and about 6% of students are international students. The students with different cultures and traditions study together, forming a friendly and diverse atmosphere, which help me gain a better and deeper understanding of other cultures. Besides, Bates offers opportunities to study abroad in more than 70 foreign locations and more than two-thirds of students take advantage of them. These opportunities are attractive for me to seek real-world experience.

I am interested in economics and would like to take it as my undergraduate major. I dream to use my knowledge to improve the bad economic conditions of my hometown. Economics is the most popular major and is also the best among Bates' best. I believe that study in Bates can definitely help me realize my dream.

Bates College is a good match for me. It would be my honor and prestige if I could attend Bates and achieve my goals.


Please give me some advice. Ｉam not good at writing "why essay" :)

The student population of Bates—intellectual, passionate, and friendly—forms an academically challenging environment which helps me meet my academic goal. Besides, the school's small size and a student-faculty ration of 10:1 mean that student/faculty interaction is plentiful, and close friendships are easily formed.


The students from different cultures and traditions study together, forming a friendly and diverse atmosphere, which helps me gain a better and deeper understanding of other cultures. Besides, Bates offers opportunities to study abroad in more than 70 foreign locations and more than two-thirds of students take advantage of them. These opportunities are attractive to me for seeking real-world experience.

I dream of using my knowledge to improve the bad economic conditions of my hometown.

Hope this helps!

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Kevin

Thanks for correcting the grammar and sentences.
I want to know whether I answer the question "why bates" well?

I think you answered the question nicely!

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