Undergraduate Admission Essays

I wrote everyday, but did not realize what an amazing world there was behind what I was... »»

Yes, it is great to explain those mid term marks here. And as Sean said, it... »»

Oh!! Great idea! But cut it off the beginning and put it at the end!!... »»

Maybe you could write: "I am pleased to have had the opportunity..." However, it's not good... »»

Growing up in Homes, [where is Homes? name of state/country], I finished high school and was forced... »»

Now the load shedding's increased to 10 hours a day . I have even worse condition than... »»

anything?? :s sorry but i have to submit it soon so i really need to know..... »»

Thank you so much for your help! I will absolutely fix the minor problems! »»

Thank you so much, Kevin! Your words have greatly encouraged me! »»

Thanks so much for your help Kevin, yes I thought that the middle paragraphs were a little... »»

Sorry I gotta do this but I gotta break it to you. It's too long. I checked... »»

Good point from ckannan90!! That is an important piece of knowledge, thank you! Many essay forum members... »»

Insects used to be the most horrifying things in the world to me. Fabre recorded... »»

It was raining, and fog spread across the windows of the car. Provided by Boston... »»

I could not find an error til the very end!! :) I can easily... »»

This made my mom a little upset, 'SHE is a girl, isn't SHE?!' Change that to:... »»

Our values make up who we are and who we will become. Because of this, the three... »»

There are many reasons for two people to decide to marry. All couples may look for stable... »»

Thanks :) »»

The story itself is well-written. The only thing is that it is a bit crowded, and seems... »»

http://admissions.tufts.edu/?pid=203 i'm not sure what the maximum is but it says here 50 words so i'm... »»

I like it. It sounds like it has already been polished quite a bit. »»

This seems a bit too general. I'd find out more about what Dr. Allen has done in... »»

Thank you so much Kevin :) »»

Thanks for the correction and comment Kevin! :) »»

Great essay. Impressed on how you got something after having nothing so quickly. And to Kevin....nice... »»

Yes, that is a tough challenge... write something that stands out and is not superficial, you need... »»

thanks for your appreciation. »»

I think you have a great idea, when I saw the topic the only thing I could... »»

The second half of your last sentence doesn't really make sense. You could just stop after "goal."... »»

The style of the essay is greatly improved. I like the quote from Lincoln near the end,... »»

The essay fits the first prompt, the one you wrote it for. As for the second one,... »»

A humorous essay, if done well, would be appropriate. A narrative essay that tells the reviewers something... »»

Omg thank you so much people! I'm really not good at this I had no idea if... »»

for my second short answer, I am a superwoman. The world and its challenges bring my... »»

thank you soooo much guys... I will defenitely incorporate all the suggesstions you have given... thank you... »»

Choose one of these, with a comma: Here, I was stunned. or Here... »»

I was going to mention that I really like some of the phrases in this last sentence:... »»

That is god advice from kikozang! I'll help, too: I volunteered my time over the... »»

Thank you soo much for the comments. »»

Thanks, I will change the tense. »»

Beautiful essay, you are a great writer. Here are some ideas: I am the girl... »»

That is great advice... a story about having come to appreciate those values is a good idea.... »»

you don't have to make it below 150 words common apps will accept forms up to around... »»

Thank you for the comments. »»

oh i see lol thats a really good point thanks for ur input »»

alright, i went with that. Thanks a bunch guys. Happy editing! »»

Thanks for all the help! I'm applying tomorrow :) »»

Sorry, I know I posted a few times on my own thread but I just had some... »»

Yeah, the North Shore area is kind of confusing, but I will agree with you that it... »»

Being part of the team since the age of eight, I have reached a veteran status and... »»

You're not supposed to end a sentence with a preposition ("in"), but people break this rule all... »»

Start with one sentence, and take your time! »»

I liked it too, and could find no errors. The last sentence was fine! Actually, though,... »»

The content and structure of this essay is very good. The diction and grammar are decent, but... »»

Thank you!!! »»

you can make it flow better by reading your essay out loud to yourself...it removes any awkwardness... »»

Thanks Kevin! »»

You might want to tone down on the obvious hyperbole in your sycophantic praise of Northwestern. Not... »»

In Religious Studies I am able to argue my point across, proving that there is more than... »»