Undergraduate Admission Essays

There's no word limit, it just gives the question and leaves it up to the writer I... »»

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Located in New York, the hub of diversity, Columbia possesses one of the most diverse student bodies... »»

I taught my students Everyday English, which was not an easy task. Most of the students were... »»

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It's great! Good luck! :) »»

Sights in India are often quickly associated with street cows, monuments, festivals and modernization, which I do... »»

You can cut out SOME of that 3rd paragraph to shorten it, but it is the 2nd... »»

Yes, change it to Malaysian, so it is more specific and descriptive. Words and phrases are... »»

"You're going to study abroad? What's your major?" I knew my answer. To say, "It's undecided," was... »»

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Ambiguity seems to bother some, and this is understandable. The ambiguous nature of literature also... »»

In July 2007, I worked as an intern for 4 days at Zhongyou Department Store. I was... »»

wow thanks alot kevin i think i kinda get it :) does the essay feel very... »»

A little more than a year ago, I was a part of a trip to Cambodia. To... »»

The mention of the book is fine!! If you talked about it any more than you did,... »»

Thanks for the feedback, everyone! Another question for you guys? Do you think the beginning... »»

YES!! Good advice from zowzow. Hey, zowzow, do you want to check out the contributor page?... »»

Honestly, I would come up with another topic and write a new essay. This essay says nothing... »»

The atmosphere is tense. Both teams sit in their seats anxiously awaiting the next tossup question. "What... »»

Yeah the deadline is nov.30... »»

Nice job with this essay, and with being such a good, strong friend. It should have... »»

Yeah, even though the luck thing is kinda true, we can't write it in the essays, can... »»

Thank you for your suggestion. It really has helped me »»

I like where you were headed at the end. The statment about how it "helped me gain... »»

thanks for taking the time to help me. I'm glad I found this site:) »»

Wow, thanks for the comments everybody! I didn't expect so much praise for this essay at all.... »»

Thank you for all of your opinions... I really appreciate them... Would you give me any grammatical... »»

mmh, I'll try to rewrite it by targeting one or two things instead of all these things.... »»

thanks a lot! I am going to correct my mistakes. »»

thanks lots, Kevin »»

yes, it is for NYU. thanks for so many people's attention and help. May all of... »»

Thanks for correcting my mistakes. :) »»

Well, you are on target for answering the question about an experience that benefited you even though... »»

Hey Yea you are right about the titles. Will try to do something about that. And thank... »»

Good Advice Angela! Thanks! »»

thank you Kevin. i hope i get in, i just submitted my application. »»

Any advices for my edited version? »»

I think it's great. Happy Christmas! :) Kevin »»

thank you so much for your help! :) »»

Meeting different people every day sounds exciting. I believe learning in such a big community gives a... »»

She may have lost the possibility of becoming a ballerina, but she still had a chance to... »»

Very good essay, good luck in school.:) Kevin »»

"Besides dormitory living conditions and a substance free-living environment, the most significant challenge I will have to... »»

ok thanks. so do you thiink the rest of the essay is good? »»

thank you so much now can you please tell me what to do to improve my ideas,... »»

Thanks for the comments and feedback. I really appreciate them a lot. You guys just like, instilled... »»

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There was a time in my life when I thought that I wasn't going to make it.... »»

Thank you! And how would a Khalil Gibran Quote fit? Wouldn't it make it less personal? »»

I've seen good friends turn into thieves and become apathetic about the suffering of their community because... »»

Here are some ideas: Today's global environment makes it necessary to have worldwide background knowledge, rather... »»

Chink, I have often thought that you would make a good contributor! Please check out the... »»

Nope, don't be stressed. If college, and the careers it prepares you for, are causing stress, it... »»

Three SATs, a few applications, and an onslaught of essay requirements have worn me out. Oh...... »»

I'll put a period after his quote here: "Scientists dream about doing great things. Engineers do... »»

Good, now if you still have the motivation to work on it some more, I guess i... »»

This is excellent. I see no errors, and I am impressed by your thoughtfulness. I think the... »»

I am having the same problem with word count as you, but I believe that this is... »»

Thanks for the comment. Will make it more specific. :) »»