Undergraduate Admission Essays

If you find that word count is not an issue and if you really like that first... »»

In my opinion, your reasons of choosing that class is a little bit self-centered. Your major is... »»

Thank you guys, all of your answers have been helpful. »»

Thanks for the help guys. Going to rework this and tinker it. »»

Thank you very much,Mr. Kevin. »»

"The scripts were surprisingly easy to understand thanks to computer science courses and felt that a week... »»

Here are some more ways you could shorten your essay: "The author had scripted something which... »»

What you write depends on what you need to accomplish. If you have a particularly low academic... »»

usually not since they don't like to receive two papers of the same information. if you've already... »»

i had the same concer, but my english reassured me that admissions love reading short papers, its... »»

Thank you!! »»

Try to be more concise in your writing. For instance: "the Honors club conducted leadership elections... »»

Hi! Well, start by telling the about the course of study you will pursue there, and... »»

"One of my core values comes from my family's constant maxim that helping others who are not... »»

After reading My Life as a Quant by Emanual Derman, which describes Derman's years at Goldman Sachs,... »»

oh, yeah sorry. »»

Where is this street that is the setting for this first sentence? I think this essay... »»

thanks for your feedback.I really appreciate that. »»

any more critiques ? »»

Being the strong and die hard sports fan that I am, I'm going to need a strong... »»

You could strengthen your essay by going into a bit more detail about just how destructive this... »»

Great advice from Kevin. You talk about all the things that are part of you, but then... »»

Yes, the second one is definitely the best of the three choices. »»

After reading Kevin's comments, I'm beginning to conclude that you probably need to rethink most of the... »»

Starting out with a current insight you have into aviation is a great idea. You could... »»

I'm not sure that you should necessarily go with arranged marriages as representing gender-inequality. You certainly could... »»

Both are Great ideas!! thanks guys »»

Oh, Sean made all the changes I was going to suggest! This is a strong little... »»

...country's monetary policies. On a periodic basis, my classmates and I would be divided into groups and... »»

Even so, I deal with topics, which I feel people face at some point in their lives.... »»

Yes, I think it works this way! Here is an idea for the end:... »»

You don't have to capitalize "knowledge" here: An example would be the lack of Knowledge in... »»

After having been told by friends that I have great aptitude for music, I enrolled into choir... »»

Why don't you try writing one sentence for each of those points, and then see if you... »»

Yeah, this essay is really strong and well-thought out. Normally I can at least find a few... »»

This essay needs more focus. What exactly is the prompt? You start out writing about your academic... »»

Ah, you've submitted it, then? Well, at least you know you handed in a draft that you... »»

Thanks a lot guys, I've submitted my application already and read through it a couple times to... »»

I've taken all your comments into account and I've arrived at what I think is going to... »»

ur welcome...idk try applying 4 howard----due dates not til feb 15 yea it would b interesting meeting... »»

Nicaragua is drastically different from New York. The Nicaraguan dry and wet seasons, in contrast, are... »»

The defining moment in our relationship came in grade eleven, when I scored dismally in the final... »»

The last thing a teacher wants is to stand alone before a large class of students ranging... »»

i wish i knew about the urgent thing ...yea the hippies part is a little dramatic lol... »»

To be a safe pilot you must have great physical mentality. This doesn't make sense to me.... »»

In college, students will meet people from countries they have never heard of or religions that they... »»

I guess you could take Kevin's advise and do the mandatory amendments. Other than that, your essay... »»

i have had some math teachers like that »»

How about we make this all one paragraph at the start, here: The thirst for learning... »»

While it is true that this the nature of the concept of "physical strength," the truth of... »»

"Change" is a reality that affects us all. For one individual it may be seen as an... »»

I also liked version 1 better, as it was somewhat clearer. This was quite an achievement... »»

For 9 years of my life, I have been sprinting full force, tripping and scratching myself up,... »»

same here - i havnt seen this prompt on their supplement »»

Here is my idea about it: Interviewing the mayor in one's home is not an everyday... »»

WOW! I never even thought about that. I used block formatting too. »»

gdtbj2008, did you write/print your essay on an extra paper? The space provided in the 'Additional... »»

If this essay is for UC campuses, then the suggested word count is actually around 500 words.... »»

It's just my suggestion, First, you should seperate it into some paragraphs, and it would be easier... »»

Thankyou so so so much ! Thats just what i needed! »»