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| East meets West UC Prompt #2 They contradict one another... that is a good observation. Can you also include a paragraph that gives... »» |
SmH Nov 16, 09, 10:51pm | EF_Kevin Nov 18, 09, 04:09pm | ||
| "the person i am today" rutgers diversity prompt Don't switch verb tense: My weekend consisted of going to... this is supposed to be about... »» |
reptar28 Nov 16, 09, 10:07pm | EF_Kevin Nov 18, 09, 03:58pm | ||
| Evaluate my personal statement for University of Arizona? I have to warn you... the admissions people might be prejudice against you if you include MMA... »» |
jk17 Nov 16, 09, 09:50pm | EF_Kevin Nov 18, 09, 03:54pm | ||
| "I have always contributed something" - Rutgers admission essay Is this under the 3800 characters they allow? It seems long. I love every paragraph.... »» |
TheseGuns Nov 14, 09, 11:15am | EF_Kevin Nov 18, 09, 03:50pm | ||
| Toefl essay"In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students reptar28: Your making the same mistake over and over, can be fixed by just reading out loud... »» |
Poojasugandhi Nov 16, 09, 08:06pm | EF_Kevin Nov 18, 09, 03:42pm | ||
| Carnegie Mellon Admission Essay (why you have chosen Carnegie Mellon) No, no! Bad first sentence! (don't ever take offense when I say critical stuff). That first sentence... »» |
lke Nov 9, 09, 05:49pm | EF_Kevin Nov 18, 09, 03:35pm | ||
| Go-go the suprising culture- UVA supplement essay Thanks guys for the feedback! I added 40 words to it, making it 220+ words. I elaborated... »» |
st21 Nov 14, 09, 06:07pm | st21 Nov 18, 09, 03:10pm | ||
| Admissions Essay about my future career plans-feedback As a child, I was the member of my family who took interest in helping those who... »» |
monkey1992 Nov 16, 09, 06:43pm | EF_Kevin Nov 18, 09, 02:59pm | ||
| "professional chefs" - Rutgers admission essay Watching professional chefs was a hobby of mine when I was near the age of ten. Bobby... »» |
bk310 Nov 16, 09, 06:11pm | EF_Kevin Nov 18, 09, 02:52pm | ||
| "Rachel's Challenge" - Common App: significant experience, achievement, risk... One more sentence at the end of that first para could make it more meaningful... give one... »» |
neil098 Nov 12, 09, 07:08pm | EF_Kevin Nov 18, 09, 02:40pm | ||
| Dreams and Aspirations ( UC Prompt ) ...news and being introduced to these depressing accounts of other people's experiences throughout the world.... »» |
pacers7ind Nov 16, 09, 03:02pm | EF_Kevin Nov 18, 09, 02:03pm | ||
| Toefl essay"What are the qualities of the good coworker?" Throughout in my experience, I noticed that good co worker should have certain qualities. She or he... »» |
Poojasugandhi Nov 16, 09, 01:23pm | EF_Kevin Nov 18, 09, 01:23pm | ||
| About natural disasters and their influences on me. This is quite an incredible essay. I really like your writing style. and little details, like ordinarily... »» |
HelpPls Nov 16, 09, 12:45pm | EF_Kevin Nov 18, 09, 01:14pm | ||
| Writing Music Reviews (Common App Short Response) It wasn't until sixth grade that when my English teacher ... Hey, maybe you should use... »» |
omarxcore Nov 12, 09, 08:52pm | EF_Kevin Nov 18, 09, 12:38pm | ||
| UCF Essay Prompt "Bumps in the Road" Thanks ;) I just wish I could write as well for the SAT, 25 minutes is not... »» |
kael92 Nov 16, 09, 09:11pm | kael92 Nov 18, 09, 12:04pm | ||
| USC prompt-Visions and Voices aquamarine: wanted to speak through a photograph this is really good, so I think you should... »» |
aquamarine Nov 14, 09, 10:03am | Rowa Nov 18, 09, 02:19am | ||
| UC Prompt 2 - Music Molds My Mission Thank you SO much for that! It helped tremendously! Very much appreciated. »» |
Rypto Nov 14, 09, 05:49pm | Rypto Nov 18, 09, 01:12am | ||
| UC Personal Statement Prompt #1 on Economics "I began purchasing bulks of high demand electronics for half of their retail price and selling them... »» |
agsabeh Nov 13, 09, 02:01pm | aleggz Nov 17, 09, 11:57pm | ||
| A Future Doctor: 7 year BS-MD Program Essay Thank you everyone for editing this! I really appreciate the feedback. glorfs: Thanks for the in... »» |
lahariv Nov 15, 09, 06:11pm | lahariv Nov 17, 09, 10:23pm | ||
| "I was born to a family of immigrants" - Editing Help for my admissions essay. Thanks for your replies I will most likely start from scratch and work from there. I did... »» |
greatzak Nov 17, 09, 02:21pm | greatzak Nov 17, 09, 06:50pm | ||
| Open topic Supplement Essay about guitar-playing Thanks for all the feedback! I've revised the final two paragraphs and my conclusion is more... »» |
glorfs Nov 15, 09, 10:03am | glorfs Nov 17, 09, 06:17pm | ||
| My career goals - need help getting started I always tell people they should be purposeful in writing admissions essays. you should have a strategy.... »» |
amybelle1092 Nov 16, 09, 10:08am | EF_Kevin Nov 17, 09, 06:14pm | ||
| My DECA Story... UC prompt #2 That 1st place trophy is a token that represents a tangible award, but it could mean less... »» |
ckseakayck Nov 16, 09, 05:58am | EF_Kevin Nov 17, 09, 05:57pm | ||
| An experience through which i have gained respect for differences Excellent, thanks! I see that you did get established as a contributor. That's great, and I... »» |
cissylewel Nov 8, 09, 01:25am | EF_Kevin Nov 17, 09, 05:50pm | ||
| Scary Daydream!!- supplement for Williams : ) I swear, I stared at this for such a long time... the first time I didn't offer... »» |
christiek Nov 8, 09, 11:55pm | EF_Kevin Nov 17, 09, 05:29pm | ||
| "born to immigrants from Japan and Croatia" - Common App Diversity Essay As the only first-generation daughter born to immigrants from Japan and Croatia, my upbringing was a strange... »» |
zomgyams Nov 15, 09, 09:31pm | EF_Kevin Nov 17, 09, 05:13pm | ||
| "never to bet against my parents" - GRAMMAR EDITING Why is it one long paragraph? That is the most important thing. One idea, one paragraph.... that... »» |
songbird91 Nov 15, 09, 09:20pm | EF_Kevin Nov 17, 09, 04:31pm | ||
| Prompt: Describe ex of your leadership. Ha ha ha, awesome, we need more people like you!! How could anyone not be impressed... »» |
brobson Nov 15, 09, 08:48pm | EF_Kevin Nov 17, 09, 04:18pm | ||
| "Never Really Considered Myself...." --Common App Short Answer Run on sentence: I never really considered myself to be quite the athlete; after years of dropped... »» |
JS2010 Nov 15, 09, 08:45pm | EF_Kevin Nov 17, 09, 04:12pm | ||
| Commonapp essay- first generation student Don't capitalize generation in that first sentence. Use a hyphen for self-learn. A little... »» |
djrmt Nov 15, 09, 07:41pm | EF_Kevin Nov 17, 09, 03:54pm | ||
| GWU essay about what influenced me to apply Out Of the many reasons that inspired me to apply ... The George Washington University... »» |
aznq01 Nov 15, 09, 07:24pm | EF_Kevin Nov 17, 09, 03:51pm | ||
| USC prompt : "Perception of Mortality" does it agree with the prompt? It was me against a one-ton, metal, forty mile-per-hour moving machine. I almost lost, indefinitely.... »» |
guffaa88 Nov 15, 09, 06:28pm | EF_Kevin Nov 17, 09, 03:35pm | ||
| UT austin "Issue essay" Also, don't capitalize nation in that first sentence. I almost want to suggest cutting it down... »» |
nuncio900 Nov 15, 09, 04:35pm | EF_Kevin Nov 17, 09, 02:58pm | ||
| "The importance of hardship"- UC Prompt My first thought is that you should let go of the first sentence. Someone who does not... »» |
tesfaw Nov 16, 09, 12:12am | EF_Susan Nov 17, 09, 01:49pm | ||
| My secret——personal essay on common application Thanks!!! very constructive advise. I will make some progress and upload my new essay~ »» |
jelly Nov 4, 09, 09:49am | jelly Nov 17, 09, 07:07am | ||
| Game Freak- Common App Essay I think your essay was really good, but I at first I thought you were going to... »» |
jindu85 Nov 14, 09, 08:12pm | karyenu Nov 17, 09, 12:20am | ||
| UC Essay Prompt 2- Grandpa's Sin, My Revelation Thank you Susan and Kevin. I'll edit it while keeping your comments in mind. I appreciate it!... »» |
tweezerman Nov 15, 09, 02:46pm | tweezerman Nov 17, 09, 12:12am | ||
| Stanford Supplement - what makes stanford a good place for you - edit please? in reference to onix, the final draft of the essay has a lot less adjectives in it.... »» |
lovebugs925 Oct 6, 09, 07:00pm | smoores Nov 16, 09, 11:31pm | ||
| "As a child, I was basically perfect." - Describe the world you come from Ummm tentatively... UCLA, UCR, UCSB, USC, NYU, UofM, UofChic, Columbia, Cal Poly San Luis I would... »» |
pinkxp92 Nov 14, 09, 09:08pm | sillygrav Nov 16, 09, 09:10pm | ||
| UC Prompt #2: Dr King Yes! Elaborate on biomed engineering, because you can show that you already read articles about breakthroughs and... »» |
saladbar_12 Nov 15, 09, 03:33pm | EF_Kevin Nov 16, 09, 08:45pm | ||
| UC essay prompt #1 Success is not easy Find ways to use fewer words to say what you need to say: ...that makes me... »» |
agilbert1992 Nov 15, 09, 03:20pm | EF_Kevin Nov 16, 09, 08:38pm | ||
| The Other Children: Columbia University personal statement evaluation? "I stared blankly at my reflection in the mirror as my mother adjusted my collar until it... »» |
sozin817 Nov 16, 09, 02:47pm | Vulpix Nov 16, 09, 08:11pm | ||
| incorporated in my enthusiasm to contribute to this school,Does this make sense? kihyun91: incorporated in my enthusiasm to contribute to this school,Does this make sense? No! :-)... »» |
kihyun91 Nov 15, 09, 01:41pm | EF_Kevin Nov 16, 09, 08:06pm | ||
| "I already had many stereotypes" - U of M: Diversity essay batmankiller: stupid and lazy and that all Jews were unfriendly and cheap Ha ha, I understand... »» |
batmankiller Nov 14, 09, 12:09pm | EF_Kevin Nov 16, 09, 07:59pm | ||
| BOULDER COLORADO ESSAY 500 words "what can you contribute to our school..." kyleroland: participate in service to the youth and underprivileged in my local communities. You should briefly... »» |
kyleroland Nov 15, 09, 01:20pm | EF_Kevin Nov 16, 09, 07:52pm | ||
| "I was always the typical shy student" - common app essay I also don't think this is too long. Since there is technically no word limit to the... »» |
stevenwong11 Nov 16, 09, 04:12pm | Vulpix Nov 16, 09, 07:47pm | ||
| Experience That Helpmed Me Learn What Was Important - CommonApp Emotional Essay Nov 16, 09, 05:48pm - Attached on merging: "What is Important To Me and Why"... »» |
Awesomeness Nov 13, 09, 01:01pm | Awesomeness Nov 16, 09, 05:46pm | ||
| Wisc Prompts - #1 Personal Experience, #2 Why Economics? You're welcome. Best of luck to you. »» |
min12 Nov 14, 09, 09:55pm | lotm30923 Nov 16, 09, 04:42pm | ||
| UC Prompt #2 Marine Corps Great improvement. A few more thoughts......"awe-inspiring pre-war speech", seems too hyphen laden. And the prompt also... »» |
guillemondet Nov 12, 09, 01:48pm | lotm30923 Nov 16, 09, 04:20pm | ||
| MIT short answer: something you like to do. I really like that you added an active voice to this essay. Top colleges are always looking... »» |
calderon Nov 12, 09, 09:19pm | sozin817 Nov 16, 09, 02:43pm | ||
| MIT "Something for fun" and "Department" Essays critique? Thanks EF_Kevin! I'm not really sure if for the second one, MIT wants a specific course or... »» |
sozin817 Nov 14, 09, 06:49pm | sozin817 Nov 16, 09, 02:40pm | ||
| UC promt 1: Environmental Studies This might not seem like a very strong subject to you, but you can make it interesting... »» |
sbenn334 Nov 15, 09, 03:46pm | EF_Susan Nov 16, 09, 02:36pm | ||
| UC Statement Writer's Block? Hi, Aalap! I think this is an excellent first paragraph and establishes your thesis well. Just... »» |
Psyche Nov 15, 09, 08:18pm | Jeannie Nov 16, 09, 01:06pm | ||
| massachusetts college of pharmacy supplement essay. I remember my whole family crying and mourning for days. As a future pharmacist, I... »» |
NEEDHELP99 Nov 15, 09, 03:39am | EF_Kevin Nov 16, 09, 01:04pm | ||
| Common app about dreams~ Just go give some ideas to other people and then give them this link to your essay... »» |
pulp Nov 7, 09, 10:41am | EF_Kevin Nov 16, 09, 12:55pm | ||
| UC Prompt #2: Rebuilding a Club Wow, I am impressed by how well you write. Also The president and I also broke... »» |
vintage Nov 14, 09, 11:58pm | EF_Kevin Nov 16, 09, 12:49pm | ||
| "Drop Ball" - Common App Essay - Applicable? Yes, it definitely answers the prompt, and yes this new ending is great. Dramatic pause: However,... »» |
Klaw30 Nov 14, 09, 11:44pm | EF_Kevin Nov 16, 09, 12:44pm | ||
| My family came to America with limited amounts of money -common app essay John Quincey Adams My family came to America with limited amounts of money and two small... »» |
NEEDHELP99 Nov 14, 09, 11:34pm | EF_Kevin Nov 16, 09, 12:42pm | ||
| If today was my last day - Common App Essay Oh.. yes, well recycling essay material is just fine. They are all your words. The thing to... »» |
hanhdung Nov 6, 09, 01:11am | EF_Kevin Nov 16, 09, 12:35pm | ||
| "a helping hand" college essay You might want to explain this meningitis encephalitis. Maybe it's just me, but I have no idea... »» |
becca3924 Nov 1, 09, 01:16pm | HelpPls Nov 16, 09, 12:24pm |
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